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Young people influenced more better friends than by their parents

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Many people think parents have a greater impact on a child I disagree. Overall, Teenagers spend more time together. On average teenagers spend around eight hours at school and they spend time with each other at after-school activities. it’s natural for a person to be influenced by others with who they spend more time with. On the other hand, because of the generation gap, teenagers would avoid taking advice from their parents parents. Parents rarely share the same in interests as their children. Creative ideas are also more likely to be achieved by people in the same age group. Tina just cope better emotionally window with the friends after a bad test or a bad day, teenagers normally feel less sad when spending time with friends. Friends play an important role in every successful person wall contribution from parents gradually become limited.
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IELTS essay Young people influenced more better friends than by their parents

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
142 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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