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Youngsters resort to violence to give vent to their frustration

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In many countries, youngsters protest against the system by damaging public properties. Is this justified? The world has become more diverse in recent past. Sometimes diversity also causes unrest between people belonging to different religion, cast and creed. Many a time disagreements between such groups lead to clashes and youngsters resort to violence to give vent to their anger. Damaging public properties is one of them. Disagreement may lead to healthy discussions and it is also considered a virtue in democracies. But violence and damage to public properties are not at all accepted in any healthy society. In many countries this phenomenon is a result of intolerance. Even a small hurt to religious sentiments causes eruption of violence and public properties are being targeted first. Youngsters feel that by doing so they are exercising their right to protest. These young people consider that damaging public property is a way to register their protest against administration. At times these youngsters also resort to such behavior to pretest against government policies. Such trends are not at all healthy. Violence by any means must be condemned. There are many other ways to protest. Damaging public properties is not only violence but also wastage of public money. These properties are being bought from the tax that public pays and they are for the public use. Youth must be sensitised about this fact. To prevent damaging public facilities, many governments have enacted laws. Miscreants are penalised heavily under those laws. In a summary, the idea of damaging public property for any reason is not at all acceptable and society must curb the menace. Society should publicly embarrass such people. Laws should be enforced strictly in such cases. And such unlawful elements must be penalized heavily. I am sure the future is bright. Society will be free of such violence and protest will be held in civilized manner.
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countries, youngsters
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protest
against the system by
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damaging
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public
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properties
. Is this justified?

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Sometimes
diversity
also
causes unrest between
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people
belonging to
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different
religion, cast and creed.
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Many
a time disagreements between such groups lead to clashes and youngsters resort to
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violence
to give vent to their anger.
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Damaging
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public
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properties
is one of them. Disagreement may lead to healthy discussions and it is
also
considered a virtue in democracies.
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But
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violence
and damage to
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public
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properties
are not at all
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accepted
in any healthy society.

In
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many
countries this phenomenon is a result of intolerance. Even a
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small
hurt to religious sentiments causes eruption of
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violence
and
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public
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properties
are
being targeted
first
. Youngsters feel that by doing
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so
they are exercising their right to
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protest
. These young
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people
consider that
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damaging
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public
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property
is a way to register their
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protest
against administration. At times these youngsters
also
resort to such behavior to pretest against
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government
policies.

Such trends are not at all healthy.
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Violence
by any means
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must
be condemned
. There are
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many
other ways to
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protest
.
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Damaging
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public
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properties
is not
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only
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violence
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but
also
wastage of
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public
money. These
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properties
are being
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bought
from the tax that
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public
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pays and
they are for the
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public
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use
. Youth
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must
be
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sensitised
about this fact.

To
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prevent
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damaging
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public
facilities,
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many
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governments
have enacted laws. Miscreants are
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penalised
heavily
under those laws.

In a summary, the
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idea
of
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damaging
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public
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property
for any reason is not at all acceptable and society
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must
curb the menace. Society should
publicly
embarrass such
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people
. Laws should
be enforced
strictly
in such cases. And such unlawful elements
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must
be
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penalized
heavily
.

I am sure the future is bright. Society will be free of such
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violence
and
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protest
will
be held
in civilized manner.
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IELTS essay Youngsters resort to violence to give vent to their frustration

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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