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Break through of Human cloning

Break through of Human cloning x0Q69
The cloning of animals has been occurring for a number of years now, and this has now opened up the possibility of cloning humans too. Although there are clear benefits to humankind of cloning to provide spare body parts, I believe it raises a number of worrying ethical issues. Due to breakthroughs in medical science and improved diets, people are living much longer than in the past. This, though, has brought with it problems. As people age, their organs can fail so they need replacing. If humans were cloned, their organs could then be used to replace those of sick people. It is currently the case that there are often not enough organ donors around to fulfil this need, so cloning humans would overcome the issue as there would then be a ready supply. However, for good reasons, many people view this as a worrying development. Firstly, there are religious arguments against it. It would involve creating other human beings and then eventually killing them in order to use their organs, which it could be argued is murder. This is obviously a sin according to religious texts. Also, dilemmas would arise over what rights these people have, as surely they would be humans just like the rest of us. Furthermore, if we have the ability to clone humans, it has to be questioned where this cloning will end. Is it then acceptable for people to start cloning relatives or family members who have died? To conclude, I do not agree with this procedure due to the ethical issues and dilemmas it would create. Cloning animals has been a positive development, but this is where it should end.
The
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of animals has been occurring for a number of years
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now
, and this has
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now
opened up the possibility of
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cloning
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humans
too. Although there are
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clear
benefits to humankind of
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cloning
to provide spare body parts, I believe it raises a number of worrying ethical issues.

Due to breakthroughs in medical science and
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improved
diets,
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people
are living much longer than in the past. This, though, has brought with it problems. As
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people
age, their
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organs
can fail
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so
they need replacing. If
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humans
were cloned
, their
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organs
could then be
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used
to replace those of sick
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people
. It is
currently
the case that there are
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often
not
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enough
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organ
donors around to fulfil this need,
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so
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cloning
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humans
would overcome the issue as there would then be a ready supply.

However
, for
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good
reasons,
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many
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people
view this as a worrying development.
Firstly
, there are religious arguments against it. It would involve creating other
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human
beings and then
eventually
killing them in order to
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use
their
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organs
, which it could
be argued
is murder. This is
obviously
a sin according to religious texts.
Also
, dilemmas would arise over what rights these
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people
have, as
surely
they would be
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humans
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just
like the rest of us.
Furthermore
, if we have the ability to clone
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humans
, it
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has to
be questioned
where this
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cloning
will
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end
. Is it then acceptable for
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people
to
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start
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cloning
relatives or family members who have
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died
?

To conclude
, I do not
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agree
with this procedure due to the ethical issues and dilemmas it would create.
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Cloning
animals has been a
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positive
development,
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but
this is where it should
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end
.
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IELTS essay Break through of Human cloning

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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