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You stayed at your friend’s house when you attended a conference in Australia. Unfortunately, you left a large envelope with some important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: •thank your friend for the stay•describe v.2

You stayed at your friend’s house when you attended a conference in Australia. Unfortunately, you left a large envelope with some important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: •thank your friend for the stay•describe v. 2
Dear Jay, I hope that this letter finds you in the best of health and spirits. I’m writing to let you know that I’ve left some important documents in your room. I’m very thankful for the support that you provided by letting me stay at your home during the two-week conference in your city. You and your family members are so welcoming, I can’t thank enough for the love and care you gave during my stay. What is more, I’ve left a brown envelope in the cupboard which is situated in the corner of your room. I don’t remember exactly whether it’s in the second or third drawer. As the envelope contains my educational documents, which I brought as a proof of eligibility to attend the conference, their importance can’t be denied. I would like to suggest that please send the said envelope by the International Courier service to my home address which is mentioned on the envelope. Don’t forget to send the tracking id as it’s the only way to locate documents. I will wait for your reply. With best regards, Sara Khan
Dear Jay,

I hope that this letter finds you in the best of health and spirits. I’m writing to
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let
you know that I’ve
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left
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some
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important
documents in your room.
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I
’m
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very
thankful for the support that you provided by letting me stay at your home during the two-week conference in your city. You and your family members are
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so
welcoming, I can’t thank
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enough
for the
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love
and care you gave during my stay.

What is more
, I’ve
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left
a brown
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envelope
in the cupboard which
is situated
in the corner of your room. I don’t remember exactly whether it’s in the second or third drawer. As the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
envelope
contains my educational documents, which I brought as a proof of eligibility to attend the conference, their importance can’t
be denied
.

I would like to suggest that
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please
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send
the said
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envelope
by the International Courier service to my home address which
is mentioned
on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
envelope
. Don’t forget to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
the tracking id as it’s the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way to locate documents.

I will wait for your reply.

With best regards,

Sara Khan
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay You stayed at your friend’s house when you attended a conference in Australia. Unfortunately, you left a large envelope with some important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: •thank your friend for the stay•describe v. 2

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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