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You have just received a sum of money from your father as a birthday present. How would you use the money? There are THREE options for you to choose: - To buy a laptop for your study - To buy a fashionable smart phone - To save up for future

You have just received a sum of money from your father as a birthday present. How would you use the money? There are THREE options for you to choose: - To buy a laptop for your study - To buy a fashionable smart phone - To save up for future w7kLY
That’s buying laptop for my study or buying fashionable smart phone or saving up for future. Let me see I will choose using this money to buy a new fashionable smart phone. Due to the fact My current phone has been used for a long time, and it has very little capacity, its battery is also damaged so I want to buy a new phone with more capacity than the old one for convenience. my information storage. I did not choose to buy a laptop because I currently own one, it is still in very good use. And I decided not to save money because I have my own savings to buy a new phone. Maybe I'll use the money my dad gave me along with the money I save to buy a better new phone.
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information storage. I did not choose to
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my dad gave me along with the
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IELTS essay You have just received a sum of money from your father as a birthday present. How would you use the money? There are THREE options for you to choose: - To buy a laptop for your study - To buy a fashionable smart phone - To save up for future

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  American English
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