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YOU HAD BORROWED A BOOK FROM LIBRARY. HOWEVER, WHEN YOU REACHED HOME, YOU FOUND THAT SOME IMPORTANT PAGES WERE TORN AWAY. WRITE A LETTER TO THE LIBRARIAN EXPLAINING THE SITUATION. YOU SHOULDMENTION THE BOOKMENTION THE PAGESSUGGEST WHAT CAN BE DONE v.1

YOU HAD BORROWED A BOOK FROM LIBRARY. HOWEVER, WHEN YOU REACHED HOME, YOU FOUND THAT SOME IMPORTANT PAGES WERE TORN AWAY. WRITE A LETTER TO THE LIBRARIAN EXPLAINING THE SITUATION. YOU SHOULDMENTION THE BOOKMENTION THE PAGESSUGGEST WHAT CAN BE DONE v. 1
The presence of the newspapers has been considered the most reliable news source for more than a centuries, but in recent decades newer form of media supplanted their influence. Some feel that these new sources of news are better and easy to access. In my opinion, I agree with this notion and will discuss compelling reasons in this essay. On the other hand, newspapers still hold the most popular position among newsreaders even though we are living in a digital world. First, since newspapers existed long before the introduction of the internet, most senior citizens have developed a habit of reading a newspaper every day, and they do not want to change this habit. Secondly, newspapers are considered more reliable source nowadays. This is because newspapers are usually written by professional journalists, and are thoroughly checked, edited and censored prior to their publication. Any other ways, The Internet have become an increasing dominant news source these days due to the benefits it offers. First thing that attracts people to reading news online is its easy access. With the widespread presence of the internet, people with portable devices, such as a smartphone can access a tremendous storage of news in just a few clicks. This is primarily because younger people tend to read the news online and prefers not to pay for it, but contrary to the older generations read newspapers, will gradually decline. This links in with the second reason, which is that as media companies start to see a drop in income from newspapers, printing them will become unprofitable and they will be forced to find ways to make money from news online. In conclusion, although newspapers remain popular today, they will gradually be replaced by the desire to read the news through electronic sources. This may be a sad loss given their history, but unfortunately it is an unavoidable development.
The presence of the
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newspapers
has
been considered
the most reliable
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news
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source
for more than
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a centuries
,
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but
in recent decades newer form of media supplanted their influence.
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Some
feel that these
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new
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sources
of
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news
are better and easy to access. In my opinion, I
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agree
with this notion and will discuss compelling reasons in this essay.

On the other hand
,
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newspapers
still
hold the most popular position among newsreaders
even though
we are living in a digital world.
First
, since
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newspapers
existed long
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before
the introduction of the internet, most senior citizens have developed a habit of reading a
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newspaper
every day, and they do not want to
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change
this habit.
Secondly
,
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newspapers
are considered
more reliable
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source
nowadays. This is
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because
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newspapers
are
usually
written by professional journalists, and are
thoroughly
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checked
, edited and censored prior to their publication.

Any other ways, The Internet have become an increasing dominant
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news
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source
these days due to the benefits it offers.
First
thing that attracts
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people
to reading
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news
online is its easy access. With the widespread presence of the internet,
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people
with portable devices, such as a smartphone can access a tremendous storage of
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news
in
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just
a few clicks. This is
primarily
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because
younger
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people
tend to read the
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news
online and prefers not to pay for it,
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but
contrary to the older generations read
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newspapers
, will
gradually
decline. This links in with the second reason, which is that as media
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companies
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start
to
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see
a drop in income from
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newspapers
, printing them will become
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unprofitable and
they will
be forced
to find ways to
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make
money from
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news
online.

In conclusion
, although
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newspapers
remain popular
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today
, they will
gradually
be replaced
by the desire to read the
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news
through electronic
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sources
. This may be a sad loss
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given
their history,
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but
unfortunately it is an unavoidable development.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay YOU HAD BORROWED A BOOK FROM LIBRARY. HOWEVER, WHEN YOU REACHED HOME, YOU FOUND THAT SOME IMPORTANT PAGES WERE TORN AWAY. WRITE A LETTER TO THE LIBRARIAN EXPLAINING THE SITUATION. YOU SHOULDMENTION THE BOOKMENTION THE PAGESSUGGEST WHAT CAN BE DONE v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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