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You are very disturbed by the noise coming from a restaurant opened nearby recently. Write a letter to the restaurant manager and say– What problem do you experience? – What should the management do about it? – v.1

You are very disturbed by the noise coming from a restaurant opened nearby recently. Write a letter to the restaurant manager and say– What problem do you experience? – What should the management do about it? – v. 1
There are umpteen reports are generated in whole years, one of them, youngsters crime rate has been incremental in other cities of the world. This essay delves into both opposite arguments, ere a logical conclusion is evolved. To start with, some teenagers have not enough maturity to decide right things in any situation and they have the freedom to do anything without restriction which helps to encourage the wrong things. For instance, some teenagers are belonging from poverty, so they can do anything for the survive. Moreover, unemployment also plays the role behind the crime because intelligent people haven't got a chance to show his talent to the society and multi-national company. For example, one of the accident tracking devices, rejected from various companies and after plenty of rejection, they decide to experiment by self suicide and prove his ability, stands as a paragon. However, the crime rate will decrease by the awareness of the value of the life which people think on different way rather than unethical way. Besides, many people are not getting sufficient support of his work so develop the some special department where they increase his skills. For instance, develop a special centre for experiment with sufficient equipment. Additionally, parents should watch the activity of his child and prevent the negative thoughts or support his activity in the right direction. For exemplify, encourage to children with some games which gives a positive impact on his life. In conclusion, I conclude that various departments should develop the wide range of activity department, which will help to reduce the offence.
There are umpteen reports
are generated
in whole years, one of them, youngsters crime rate has been incremental in other cities of the world. This essay delves into both opposite arguments, ere a logical conclusion
is evolved
.

To
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start
with,
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some
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teenagers
have not
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enough
maturity to decide right things in any
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
situation and
they have the freedom to do anything without restriction which
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helps
to encourage the
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wrong
things.
For instance
,
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some
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teenagers
The verb 'belonging' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are belonging
from poverty,
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so
they can do anything for
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'survive' is correct. If 'survive' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the survive
.
Moreover
, unemployment
also
plays the role behind the crime
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because
intelligent
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people
haven't
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got
a chance to
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show
his talent to the society and multi-national
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company
.
For example
, one of the accident tracking devices, rejected from various
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companies
and after
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plenty
of rejection, they decide to experiment by self suicide and prove his ability, stands as a paragon.

However
, the crime rate will decrease by the awareness of the value of the life which
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people
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think
on
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different
way
rather
than unethical way.
Besides
,
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many
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people
are not getting sufficient support of his work
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so
develop the
Did you mean "same"?
some
special department where they increase his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
For instance
, develop a special
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
for experiment with sufficient equipment.
Additionally
, parents should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
the activity of his child and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
thoughts or support his activity in the right direction. For exemplify, encourage to children with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
games which gives a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impact on his life.

In conclusion
, I conclude that various departments should develop the wide range of activity department, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
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reduce
the
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offence
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are very disturbed by the noise coming from a restaurant opened nearby recently. Write a letter to the restaurant manager and say– What problem do you experience? – What should the management do about it? – v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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