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You are at university where two students must share each dormitory room. Would you prefer to select your own roommate or let the university assign a roommate to you? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer.

You are at university where two students must share each dormitory room. Would you prefer to select your own roommate or let the university assign a roommate to you? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer. aJRWG
• Generally, some people prefer that we should share the room with unknown persons while other prefer that room should be shared your our friends only. From my point of view, we should shared rooms with unknown person due to this we can find new friends, and we can learnt a lot of things from his daily life also. Let we discuss about this in following passage. • The students of university sometimes talks about the advantage and disadvantages of room sharing but If you are new at university then you must live with what university advice because we are new at that place so we can learn a lot of things like his daily routine, time management etc. For example, when i was studying degree, my subject was building construction and my roomate subject was electronics. I came to know few Electronics related terms and little knowledge about the subject because we used to discuss. • If I share a room with a person whom I already know I will not discover new extra-curricular activities. While my new roommate will probably show me into the new world by supporting new club or extra-curricular activities, which I would like to enter. Besides studying it is beneficial to go to painting or sport clubs. Therefore, without new interactions I will not maybe accepted to such clubs or even know about their existence. • In conclusion, some people may prefer to assign their own roommate. However, I prefer to choose the roommates which university assign.
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Generally
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people
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prefer
that we should share the
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room
with unknown persons while other
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prefer
that
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room
should
be shared
your our friends
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only
. From my point of view, we should
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shared
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rooms
with unknown person due to this we can find
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new
friends, and we can
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learnt
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a lot of
things from his daily life
also
.
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Let
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we
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discuss about this
in following passage.

• The students of
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university
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sometimes
talks about the advantage and disadvantages of
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room
sharing
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but
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new
at
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university
then you
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must
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live
with what
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university
advice
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because
we are
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new
at that place
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so
we can learn
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a lot of
things like his daily routine, time management etc.
For example
, when
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i
was studying degree, my subject was building construction and my
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roomate
subject was electronics. I came to know few Electronics related terms and
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little
knowledge about the subject
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because
we
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used
to discuss.

• If I share a
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room
with a person whom I already know I will not discover
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new
extra-curricular activities. While my
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new
roommate will
probably
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show
me into the
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new
world by supporting
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new
club or extra-curricular activities, which I would like to enter.
Besides
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studying it
is beneficial to go to painting or sport clubs.
Therefore
, without
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new
interactions I will not maybe
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accepted
to such clubs or even know about their existence.

•
In conclusion
,
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some
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people
may
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prefer
to assign their
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own
roommate.
However
, I
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prefer
to choose the roommates which
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university
assign.
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IELTS essay You are at university where two students must share each dormitory room. Would you prefer to select your own roommate or let the university assign a roommate to you? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer.

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