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The laptop which a special and important gift I have from my parents. They gave it to me when I had studied in grade 12. I was consequently happy. due to the fact school bans cell phone use, this laptop was helpful for me to study for the college entrance exam. Then, thanks to my parents, in the college entrance exam I got an unexpectedly high score. Maybe this is the gift biggest for them. The laptop that is a product was made by Dell Inc. its color is black and Its size is about 14 inches, immensely convenient to bring. What I like the most about this laptop is the benefits that it brings supremely useful for learning. Especially now that I'm learning online, it makes it easy for me to access new knowledge and work in teams with friends. this is why it's so important to me right now. Aside from, in my free time, I usually use it to watch films or listen to music. And I know this laptop has a plethora of functions that I haven't used yet. Consequently, I will try to make the most of them in the future. Regardless of material value or spiritual value, this gift is extremely enormous to me. I think I am so lucky when I have been cared for by my parents. I love them!
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gift I have from my parents. They gave it to me when I had studied in grade 12. I was
consequently
happy.
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to the fact school bans cell phone
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, this
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laptop
was helpful for me to study for the college entrance exam. Then, thanks to my parents, in the college entrance exam I
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got
an
unexpectedly
high score. Maybe this is the gift biggest for them. The
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laptop
that is
a product
was made
by Dell Inc. its color is black and Its size is about
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14 inches
,
immensely
convenient to bring. What I like the most about this
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is the benefits that it brings
supremely
useful for learning.
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now
that I'm learning online, it
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makes
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to me right
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now
. Aside from, in my free time, I
usually
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use
it to
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watch
films or listen to music. And I know this
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laptop
has a plethora of functions that I haven't
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used
yet
.
Consequently
, I will try to
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make
the most of them in the future. Regardless of material value or spiritual value, this gift is
extremely
enormous to me. I
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think
I am
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lucky when I have
been cared
for by my parents. I
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them!
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IELTS essay writing about something important which you have

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
228 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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