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Write one world problem that worry you write a paragraph describing your outlook and attitude about the problem.

Write one world problem that worry you write a paragraph describing your outlook and attitude about the problem. keRdN
A number of governments believe if people are forced to have a same religion, chaos will be avoided. in fact, not only it is not stopping people to protest, but it also giving more reason to the new generation to fight for liberty. Islam is the most common government but not to mention it is also the most patriarchal. For instant, during praying men must stand forward or women must cover all of their body but face and handsfor going out while men do not even need to cpover their hair.
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governments
believe if
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people
are forced
to have a same religion, chaos will
be avoided
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in
fact, not
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only
it is not stopping
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people
to protest,
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but
it
also
giving more reason to the new generation to fight for liberty. Islam is the most common
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government
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but
not to mention it is
also
the most patriarchal. For instant, during praying
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men
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must
stand forward or women
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must
cover all of their body
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but
face and
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handsfor
going out while
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men
do not even need to
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cpover
their hair.
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IELTS essay Write one world problem that worry you write a paragraph describing your outlook and attitude about the problem.

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