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When I was 5 years old, I dreamed of becoming a teacher to help children in my country have an open future. When I was 10 years old, I wanted to be a football player because I took an avid interest in playing football with my friends that day. When I was 14 years old, I chose journalism as my major in the next 5 years because I both keened on writing and had a head for writing too. When I was 16 years old, I realized that a perfect job is a combination of four elements which are mission, passion, profession, and vocation. But when I was 18, I chose a job with merely thinking of the best suitable job for me. And now, I roll up my sleeves to conquer it …

When I was 5 years You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgrayancienttiredelderlydecrepitvenerable
old
, I dreamed of becoming a teacher to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 children in my country have an open future.

When I was 10 years You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgrayancienttiredelderlydecrepitvenerable
old
, I wanted to be a football player This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I took an avid interest in playing football with my friends that day.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
When
 I was 14 years You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgrayancienttiredelderlydecrepitvenerable
old
, I chose journalism as my major in the next
 5 years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I both keened on writing and had a head for writing too.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
When
 I was 16 years You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgrayancienttiredelderlydecrepitvenerable
old
, I realized that a perfect job is a combination of four elements which are mission, passion, profession, and vocation.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 when I was 18, I chose a job with merely
 thinking of the best suitable job for me. And This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
, I roll up my sleeves to conquer it …