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Write about NELSON MANDELA

Write about NELSON MANDELA pV30
Nelson was a black man from south Africa. He had a good education. He moved to Johannesburg in south Africa in 1941. He joined the African Congress the oldest black political organization in south Africa. In 1955 ANC and other organizations call all different races to work together for their freedom. Nelson worked with them too. In 1962 Nelson captured from the government and they sent him to isolated island to stay their for rest of his life. While he was in the jail, his wife continued to call for freedom with black people. After that he got out from the prison because they didn't found any evidence proved that he was guilty. After that he worked hard to achieve his goal. He Participated in the election and he became the first black president in south Africa in 1994. He established more than two organizations in different majors to help people.
Nelson was a black
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man
from
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south Africa
. He had a
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good
education. He
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moved
to Johannesburg in
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south Africa
in 1941.
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He
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joined
the African Congress the oldest black political organization in
Capitalize specific, well-defined geographical regions: "South Africa"
south Africa
. In 1955 ANC and other organizations call all
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different
races to work together for their freedom. Nelson worked with them too. In 1962 Nelson captured from the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
government and
they
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sent
him to isolated island to stay their for rest of his life. While he was in the jail, his wife continued to call for freedom with black
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people
. After that he
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got
out from the prison
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because
they didn't found any evidence proved that he was guilty.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
that he worked
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hard
to achieve his goal. He Participated in the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
election and
he became the
first
black president in
Capitalize specific, well-defined geographical regions: "South Africa"
south Africa
in 1994. He established more than two organizations in
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different
majors to
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help
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people
.

IELTS essay Write about NELSON MANDELA

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
151 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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