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Write about activities which can improve people’s memory.

Write about activities which can improve people’s memory. Mya5o
These days we are under lots of pressure that can affect our short-term memory and we can do dozens of activities to improve it. Research has shown that people who regularly consume lots of added sugar, may have poorer memory, so we should control the amount of added sugar that we eat every day. In addition, some supplements like vitamin D3 and Omega3 are essential for improving our long-term or short-term memory. Moreover, we can take advantage of meditation methods to solve this serious problem. Scientists said that if you are sleep deprived, you could be negatively impacting your memory, so have a schedule and enough sleep has a direct impact on our memory. Of course, there are lots of other home remedies and methods for improving this part of our brain but I think those are the most important ones.
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sugar, may have poorer
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we should control the amount of
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sugar that we eat every day.
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supplements like vitamin D3 and Omega3 are essential for improving our long-term or short-term
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memory
.
Moreover
, we can take advantage of meditation methods to solve this serious problem. Scientists said that if you are sleep deprived, you could be
negatively
impacting your
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memory
,
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so
have a schedule and
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enough
sleep has a direct impact on our
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memory
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IELTS essay Write about activities which can improve people’s memory.

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