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Write a storyline for a game

Write a storyline for a game LLxRr
Once you have found the vaccine to immunize thousand of people from exposing to the virus, there are still hurdles that are waiting for you down the road. Actually, there is a member from the organizing team that was vaccinated before but in this round this mem is still affected by the virus. As humans have discovered, this is a newly-mutated form of the virus, which means that your vaccine in the previous round is no longer effective on this mem. Furthermore, as far as you all know, vaccine does only work on "uninfected yet" people, so that in this phase you can't track vaccine again but to unearth the actual cure to radically defeat this virus, not just stopping it from attacking people. But how to find it? there are not many left before the savant passed away but a piece of paper contained formula. With just a few lines may help you acknowledge something. Read it cautiously and rack your brain to discover the cure as soon as possible to recover the team-mate.
Once you have found the
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vaccine
to immunize
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thousand
of
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people
from exposing to the
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virus
, there are
still
hurdles that are waiting for you down the road. Actually, there is a member from the organizing team that
was vaccinated
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before
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but
in this round this
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mem
is
still
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affected
by the
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virus
. As humans have discovered, this is a
newly
-mutated form of the
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virus
, which means that your
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vaccine
in the previous round is no longer effective on this
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mem
.
Furthermore
, as far as you all know,
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vaccine
does
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only
work on
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"
uninfected
yet
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"
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people
,
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so
that in this phase you can't
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track
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vaccine
again
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but
to unearth the actual cure to
radically
defeat this
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virus
, not
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just
stopping it from attacking
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people
.
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But
how to find it?
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there
are not
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many
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left
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before
the savant passed away
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but
a piece of paper contained formula. With
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just
a few lines may
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help
you acknowledge something. Read it
cautiously
and rack your brain to discover the cure as
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soon
as possible to recover the team-mate.
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IELTS essay Write a storyline for a game

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
175 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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