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Write a short narrative paragraph about the most memorable day of your life.

Write a short narrative paragraph about the most memorable day of your life. 6aYqB
Memories are the thing that I believe everyone who lives in the world has. And certainly, each people has the most memorable day of their life and so do I. I will tell you about the day that is so special for me, the most memorable day, and the day that I will never forget. It was a night that 2 days after the day I received the result of the National high school exam when I stayed at home alone. My friend told me that she saw the scholarship announcement of my college on Facebook. That time I felt so nervous and a little bit scared. Then I found my school’s website and searched for my result. Fortunately, my essay got a high score and I got a 30% scholarship. T knew that was not a big achievement for someone but for me, I was so proud of myself. This was the first success to give me more motivation than its value. I felt so lucky and thanks for my efforts. And I will never forget that day.
Memories are the thing that I believe everyone who
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lives
in the world has. And
certainly
, each
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people
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has
the most memorable day of their life and
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so
do I. I will
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tell
you about the day
that is
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so
special for me, the most memorable day, and the day that I will never forget. It was a night that 2 days after the day I received the result of the National high school exam when I stayed at home alone. My friend
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me that she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
the scholarship announcement of my college on Facebook. That time I felt
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so
nervous and a
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little bit
scared. Then I found my school’s website and searched for my result.
Fortunately
, my essay
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got
a high score and I
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got
a 30% scholarship. T knew that was not a
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big
achievement for someone
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but
for me, I was
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so
proud of myself. This was the
first
success to give me more motivation than its value. I felt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
lucky and thanks for my efforts. And I will never forget that day.

IELTS essay Write a short narrative paragraph about the most memorable day of your life.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
179 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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