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World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Unlike in the old-times, there are many women are coming to the top of the ladders. It is argued by many that men's leadership is often involving war and battle while women's leadership is rather peaceful. I completely disagree with the view and this essay will subject that gender is not the scale of measuring the quality of peace. Firstly, it is entirely false to claim that women can present a peaceful reign in comparison with men. This is due to the fact that there are many cases of women's leadership had led to conflict and war.
Unlike in the
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-times, there are
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women are coming to the top of the ladders. It
is argued
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many
that
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's leadership is
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often
involving war and battle while women's leadership is
rather
peaceful. I completely disagree with the view and this essay will subject that gender is not the scale of measuring the quality of peace.

Firstly
, it is
entirely
false to claim that women can present a peaceful reign
in comparison
with
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men
.
This is due to the fact that
there are
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cases of women's leadership had led to conflict and war.

IELTS essay World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership.

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