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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A few of us think teaching youth in schools to be a good parent is a great idea. I agree with this statement as young minds are open to learning various skills at an early stage, and this can help each of them to be a better parent in the future. Certain parenting qualities like being responsible, taking care, or even nourishing a child properly can be taught at school. While growing up, children learn things faster than a grown-up man or a woman. This fact can be used by schools to teach a student to be a good parent. Various schools worldwide use many techniques to enhance the parenting qualities in a child from an early age. For instance, a school in New York gives each student in the fifth grade a crying baby toy to take care of for two months. The teachers would then observe each student's behavior with the baby toy and teach each child the necessary parenting skills. Some of the parenting skills absolutely needed to take care of a child include being responsible and providing proper nourishment from time to time. Taking a child's responsibility means taking care of the child's health and providing them the basic necessities, namely, food, shelter, and clothing. Nonetheless, in the current times, protecting a child from any health hazards or dangerous people has become more crucial than ever. These skills could be taught in schools using a lot of experiments. In conclusion, parents of young people could admit them into schools which teach their students skills that are not only professionally important but also make them a better parent.
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skills
at an early stage, and this can
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help
each of them to be a better
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parent
in the future. Certain
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parenting
qualities like being responsible, taking
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care
, or even nourishing a
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child
properly
can
be taught
at school.

While growing up, children learn things faster than a grown-up
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man
or a woman. This fact can be
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used
by
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schools
to teach a student to be a
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good
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parent
. Various
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schools
worldwide
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use
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many
techniques to enhance the
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parenting
qualities in a
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child
from an early age.
For instance
, a
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school
in New York gives each student in the fifth grade a crying baby toy to take
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care
of for two months. The teachers would then observe each student's behavior with the baby toy and teach each
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child
the necessary
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parenting
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skills
.

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Some of the
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parenting
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skills
absolutely
needed to take
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care
of a
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child
include being responsible and providing proper nourishment from time to time. Taking a child's responsibility means taking
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care
of the child's health and providing them the
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basic necessities
,
namely
, food, shelter, and clothing. Nonetheless, in the
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current
times, protecting a
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child
from any health hazards or
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dangerous
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people
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has
become more crucial than ever. These
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skills
could
be taught
in
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schools
using
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a lot of
experiments.

In conclusion
,
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parents
of young
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people
could admit them into
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schools
which teach their students
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skills
that are not
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only
professionally
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important
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also
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make
them a better
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parent
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IELTS essay : Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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