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Working for fewer days but longer hours

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Throughout history, people have always tried to find a job that satisfies there needs in a better way. In this regard, there is a new argument among academicians and labour activists about whether working three days a week with longer hours is more suitable for workers or working five days a week with shorter hours. I personally contend that the former is more beneficial for every recruited person and in following paragraphs I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two outstanding reasons. The first exquisit point to be mentioned is that by working fewer days a week, everybody has enough time for other activities. It is true that job has a prominent role in every person's life, but it is not the whole life. Every human being needs enough time for personal development and self-cognition. Take a personal experience as an example; three years ago I had a job in a newspaper and I was supposed to write some articles three days a week. So, I had enough time to participate in theater practices which is my main interest in life. Playing and acting a scene needs much practice and time and it is not possible to rehearse less than four days a week. That kind of job made me capble of playing in one theater at the same time that I was working. Another equally important point which deserves to be mentioned is that working for fewer days makes it possible to progress better in work too. To be more clear, every job has two main parts: tasks and education. One can be successful in his or her job that can develops knowledge and avoid of staying fixed and unchanged. Thus, a good work condition will provide workers and employees enough time to educate themselves and expand their knowledge. For instance, my brother works in a company four days a week, but the company has asked them to study the latest updates in their fields and even has considered big raises in their wages in condition they get professional certifications in their fields. But they have to learn and study these materials in their free time. If they were supposed to work more days in week, they would have no time for self-education. To wrap up, I firmly believe that working three days a week but in longer hours is more suitable for employees than working 5 days a week for shorter hours. Having time for another activities and the possibility of self-education are two main reasons that justify my perspective.
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people
have always tried to find a
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that satisfies there needs in a better way. In this regard, there is a new argument among academicians and
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activists about whether
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working
three days a
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with longer
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hours
is more suitable for workers or
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working
five days a
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week
with shorter
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. I
personally
contend that the former is more beneficial for every recruited person and in following paragraphs I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two outstanding reasons.

The
first
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exquisit
point to
be mentioned
is that by
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fewer days a
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, everybody has
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enough
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time
for other activities. It is true that
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has a prominent role in every person's life,
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but
it is not the whole life. Every human being needs
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enough
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time
for personal development and self-cognition. Take a personal experience as an example; three years ago I had a
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job
in a
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newspaper and
I
was supposed
to write
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some
articles three days a
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.
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So
, I had
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enough
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to participate in theater practices which is my main interest in life. Playing and acting a scene needs much practice and
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time
and it is not possible to rehearse less than four days a
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week
. That kind of
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job
made me
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capble
of playing in one theater at the same
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that I was working.

Another
equally
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important
point which deserves to
be mentioned
is that
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for fewer days
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makes
it possible to progress better in
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work
too. To be more
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clear
, every
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has two main parts: tasks and education. One can be successful in
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his or her
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that can develops knowledge and avoid of staying
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fixed
and unchanged.
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, a
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good
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condition will provide workers and employees
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enough
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to educate themselves and expand their knowledge.
For instance
, my brother works in a
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four days a
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,
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but
the
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company
has asked them to study the latest updates in their fields and even has considered
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big
raises in their wages in condition they
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get
professional certifications in their fields.
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But
they
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have to
learn and study these materials in their free
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. If they
were supposed
to
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work
more days in
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, they would have no
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time
for self-education.

To wrap up, I
firmly
believe that
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three days a
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week
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but
in longer
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is more suitable for employees than
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5 days a
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week
for shorter
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hours
. Having
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for another activities and the possibility of self-education are two main reasons that justify my perspective.

IELTS essay Working for fewer days but longer hours

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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