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For instance, when I worked as part of a marketing team in my previous job, I usually needed to cooperate with not only my team members but also sales team to reach the sales goal. However, since we all worked hard for the same goal, it is difficult to distinguish who is responsible for the final success. It could be very frustrating when my boss gave all credits to the sales team and neglect my efforts. It wasn’t until I left the company and started my own business I realized that working independently empowers me to have my own work and find my sense of accomplishment.
For instance
, when I worked as part of a marketing
team
in my previous job, I
usually
needed to cooperate with not
only
my
team
members
but
also
sales
team
to reach the sales goal.
However
, since we all worked
hard
for the same goal, it is difficult to distinguish who is responsible for the final success. It could be
very
frustrating when my boss gave all credits to the sales
team
and neglect my efforts. It wasn’t until I
left
the
company
and
started
my
own
business I realized that working
independently
empowers me to have my
own
work and find my sense of accomplishment.
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IELTS essay work independently helps people have ownership

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
106 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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