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With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. WbeW
# 1. Introduction **1. 1. Background statement (= Paraphrasing)** Over the last few decades globalized world's dependence on fossil fuel has increased dramatically. Due to oil depletion in old fields along with the enhanced demand, it's being suggested that untapped resources should be explored. **1. 2. Thesis statement (=answer, introduction to my idea)** This essay will argue why the exploitation of new areas is not a sensible thing to do in the long-term and we should turn our attention to renewable energy. # 2. Supporting paragraph 1 **2. 1. Topic sentence (A)** First and foremost, allowing access to more resources is not the solution to alleviating the energy problem per se. **2. 2 Explanation** Indubitably, exploring unextracted resources will let mitigate the increased demand and curb the skyrocket in energy price. However, extremely cheap energy leads to its wasteful using and postpones implementation of energy efficiency technologies which help reduce energy consumption whilst maintaing a comparable or higher level of service. **2. 3. Example** For example, Germany has managed to decrease its energy intensity almost twice thanks to the energy efficiency program initiated by the Government, the ban for inland oil and gas drilling, and shifting to clean renewable energy resourses in order to reduce global warming. # 3. Supporting paragraph 2 **3. 1. Topic sentence (B)** Yes, carbon-based fuels cause climate change and it's an existential challenge for our planet. It's senseless to take a big risk when there's spectrum of alternative renewable energy source available. **3. 2 Explanation** With the development of the technologies, wind energy, solar and biomass are getting more and more widespread. Rebuilding the energy industry across the board allowing for renewable energy might sound daunting. **3. 3. Example** However, Britain has achivied significant results and reduced its carbon emissions by 45% since 1990 by replacing its coal-fired and gas power stations with offshore windmills. # 4. Conclusion In conclusion, I believe that we should come towards an understanding of our responsibility to climate change and stop turning a blind eye to global warming and put much effort to preserve our fragile planet from irreversible damage and devastation of unthinkable proportions. We could be more vociferous in our demands and call for the government to allocate more money to advancing energy-efficiency technology and restrict investments in traditional energy sectors.
# 1. Introduction

**1. 1. Background statement (= Paraphrasing)**

Over the last few decades globalized world's dependence on fossil fuel has increased
dramatically
. Due to oil depletion in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
fields along with the enhanced demand, it's
being suggested
that untapped resources should
be explored
.

**1. 2. Thesis statement (=answer, introduction to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
)**

This essay will argue why the exploitation of new areas is not a sensible thing to do in the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
long-term and
we should turn our attention to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy. #
2. Supporting paragraph 1

**2. 1. Topic sentence (A)**

First
and foremost, allowing access to more resources is not the solution to alleviating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
problem per se.

**2. 2 Explanation**

Indubitably
, exploring
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unextracted
resources will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
mitigate the increased demand and curb the skyrocket in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
price.
However
,
extremely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
leads to its wasteful using and postpones implementation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
efficiency technologies which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
consumption whilst
Possible spelling mistake found.
maintaing
a comparable or higher level of service.

**2. 3. Example**

For example
, Germany has managed to decrease its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
intensity almost twice thanks to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
efficiency program initiated by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
, the ban for inland oil and gas drilling, and shifting to clean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
Possible spelling mistake found.
resourses
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
global warming.

# 3. Supporting paragraph 2

**3. 1. Topic sentence (B)**

Yes, carbon-based fuels cause climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
and it's an existential challenge for our planet. It's senseless to take a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
when there's spectrum of alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
source available.

**3. 2 Explanation**

With the development of the technologies, wind
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
, solar and biomass are getting more and more widespread. Rebuilding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
industry across the board allowing for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
might sound daunting.

**3. 3. Example**

However
, Britain has
Possible spelling mistake found.
achivied
significant results and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
its carbon emissions by 45% since 1990 by replacing its coal-fired and gas power stations with offshore windmills.

# 4. Conclusion

In conclusion
, I believe that we should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
towards an understanding of our responsibility to climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
turning a blind eye to global warming and put much effort to preserve our fragile planet from irreversible damage and devastation of unthinkable proportions. We could be more vociferous in our demands and call for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to allocate more money to advancing energy-efficiency technology and restrict investments in traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
sectors.
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IELTS essay With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources.

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  American English
21 paragraphs
384 words
5.5
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