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Write about the following topic. With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? wNOr
There is no doubt that health care doing its best. Taking care of old people is popular issue these days. In this essay I will discuss how the society will be able to ride with the increase of amount of old people and I will give my opinion. In terms of society, firstly, Its priority, the main reason given to support this claim is that old people are a member of society and its duty on society to take care of them. For instance, in public places their special needs must be met, to illustrate, in scandanivian countries we can see in public utility, every thing they need is there, chairs are equipped with special tries. Moreover, in public gardens there are several special roads to elderly people. Secondly, due to this epidemic spreading now, elderly people in dangerous, we must help them psychologically as well as we can, during covid 19 we must try to avoid telling them bad news, it might let them freaking out. However, if the society united together from the younger to the older in addition to the goverment and health care, they will cope these challenges. In conclusion, although the improvements in today’s health care, I totally feel that society can facing this increase of old people.
There is no doubt that health
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doing its best. Taking
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care
of
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old
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people
is popular issue these days. In this essay I will discuss how the
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society
will be able to ride with the increase of amount of
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old
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people
and I will give my opinion.

In terms of
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society
,
firstly
, Its priority, the main reason
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given
to support this claim is that
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old
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people
are a member of
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society
and its duty on
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society
to take
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care
of them.
For instance
, in public places their special needs
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must
be met
, to illustrate, in
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scandanivian
countries we can
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see
in public utility, every thing they need is there, chairs
are equipped
with special tries.
Moreover
, in public gardens there are several special roads to elderly
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people
.
Secondly
, due to this epidemic spreading
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now
, elderly
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people
in
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dangerous
, we
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must
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help
them
psychologically
as well
as we can, during
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covid 19
we
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try to avoid telling them
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bad
news, it might
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let
them freaking out.

However
, if the
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society
united together from the younger to the older
in addition
to the
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goverment
and health
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care
, they will cope these challenges.

In conclusion
, although the improvements in
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today
’s health
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care
, I
totally
feel that
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society
can facing this increase of
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old
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people
.
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IELTS essay With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
213 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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