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With the development of tourism, more and more cheap and discount fights are made available to holidaymakers. Some environmental groups claim that governments should tax air traffic more because its growth has a tremendous impact on the environment.

With the development of tourism, more and more cheap and discount fights are made available to holidaymakers. Some environmental groups claim that governments should tax air traffic more because its growth has a tremendous impact on the environment. m197A
With the transportation revolution, travelling abroad is becoming familiar to tourists, which induces the airlines to launch discounted tickets to attract customers. However, some environmentalists are convinced that air traffic poses a threat to the environment. Thus, taxes should be imposed on tickets. Other hold an opposing opinion that the policy is not efficacious enough and should not be enforced. My stance is in line with the latter one as the following paragraphs show. Firstly, the imposition of taxes will certainly raise the prices of tickets as the airlines consider the overall cost. As a result, customers have no choice but to pay for the added taxes since there are few alternatives of transport to go abroad. Moreover, the increasing price is a financial burden on most families and individuals. As some of them perceive travelling overseas a reward for their hard-working, additional taxes make it more difficult for them to afford the pricey tickets, depriving them of the possibility to travel abroad. Second, levying taxes on tickets is not directly related to conserving the environment. It is also in dispute whether governments will distribute money from the taxes to environmental protection. Worse yet, corruption may happen and throw into question the original intention of the taxation. Therefore, from my perspective, other solutions can be implemented to improve our surroundings more effectively, for instance, renovating the old aeroplanes to avoid emitting an excessive amount of gases which are harmful to the air quality or research on alternative energy resources which are more environmentally friendly. In either case, environmental problems can be solved rather than imposing taxes. To sum up, the impact on the environment brought by the aeroplanes cannot be neglected. However, given the above factors, imposing taxes might not be the best approach.
With the transportation revolution, travelling abroad is becoming familiar to tourists, which induces the airlines to launch discounted
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tickets
to attract customers.
However
,
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some
environmentalists
are convinced
that air traffic poses a threat to the environment.
Thus
,
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taxes
should
be imposed
on
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tickets
. Other hold an opposing opinion that the policy is not efficacious
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enough
and should not
be enforced
. My stance is in line with the latter one as the following paragraphs
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show
.

Firstly
, the imposition of
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taxes
will
certainly
raise the prices of
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tickets
as the airlines consider the
overall
cost.
As a result
, customers have no choice
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but
to pay for the
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added
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taxes
since there are few alternatives of transport to go abroad.
Moreover
, the increasing price is a financial burden on most families and individuals. As
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of them perceive travelling overseas a reward for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-working, additional
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taxes
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make
it more difficult for them to afford the pricey
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tickets
, depriving them of the possibility to travel abroad.

Second, levying
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taxes
on
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tickets
is not
directly
related to conserving the environment. It is
also
in dispute whether
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
will distribute money from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
to environmental protection. Worse
yet
, corruption may happen and throw into question the original intention of the taxation.
Therefore
, from my perspective, other solutions can
be implemented
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
our surroundings more
effectively
,
for instance
, renovating the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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aeroplanes
to avoid emitting an excessive amount of gases which are harmful to the air quality or research on alternative energy resources which are more
environmentally
friendly. In either case, environmental problems can
be solved
rather
than imposing taxes.

To sum up, the impact on the environment brought by the
Possible spelling mistake. 'aeroplanes' is British English.
aeroplanes
cannot
be neglected
.
However
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the above factors, imposing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
might not be the best approach.
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IELTS essay With the development of tourism, more and more cheap and discount fights are made available to holidaymakers. Some environmental groups claim that governments should tax air traffic more because its growth has a tremendous impact on the environment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
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