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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always make new friends. To what extend do you agree?

With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always make new friends. wWGY
It is believed that advancement of digital communications has broadened the horizon of connectivity which help individuals in making new relationship and never feel isolated. This essay is partly agreeing with it because, although, online communication has opened the gateways to connect across the globe and being friends with a stranger as well, one cannot rely on these networks in a difficult situation. On the one hand, advancement of technology has brought people together across the world in one platform. In other words, now anyone can connect their family members and friends as and when needed. As a result, feeling of homesickness and loneliness will never get over us because our dear ones are always a call away. For example, social sites such as, Facebook, Instagram, WhatsApp always provide unlimited ways to communicate or call far away. However, these means of communication allows users to make a friend with unknown people as well more easily which can be considered just add-on numbers in a friend list. These type of connects cannot be measured during extreme situations. Also, sometimes, men and women are trapped by hackers or cheaters through smartphone applications. For instance, in India, many cases of fraudulent activities from online dating sites has been lodged from past few months. Thus, the advent of online means of communications can brings myriads of trouble if people are not operating it cautiously. To conclude, development of online communication platform aid people to stays connected and shrink the entire world in a box, it can be dangerous for the people if they will not use it wisely.
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is believed
that advancement of digital communications has broadened the horizon of connectivity which
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help
individuals in making new relationship and never feel isolated. This essay
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is partly agreeing
with it
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because
, although,
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online
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communication
has opened the gateways to connect across the globe and being
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friends
with a stranger
as well
, one cannot rely on these networks in a difficult situation.

On the one hand, advancement of technology has brought
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people
together across the world in one platform.
In other words
,
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now
anyone can connect their family members and
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friends
as and when needed.
As a result
, feeling of homesickness and loneliness will never
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get
over us
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because
our dear ones are always a call away.
For example
, social sites such as, Facebook, Instagram, WhatsApp always provide unlimited ways to communicate or call far away.

However
, these means of
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communication
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allows
users to
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make
a
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friend
with unknown
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people
as well
more
easily
which can
be considered
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just
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add
-on numbers in a
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friend
list. These type of connects cannot
be measured
during extreme situations.
Also
,
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sometimes
,
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men
and women
are trapped
by hackers or cheaters through smartphone applications.
For instance
, in India,
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many
cases of fraudulent activities from
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online
dating sites has
been lodged
from past few months.
Thus
, the advent of
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online
means of communications can brings myriads of trouble if
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people
are not operating it
cautiously
.

To conclude
, development of
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online
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communication
platform aid
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people
to stays connected and shrink the entire world in a box, it can be
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dangerous
for the
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people
if they will not
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use
it
wisely
.
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IELTS essay With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always make new friends.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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