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With the advent of cutting edge technology many electronic gadgets are invented. Nowadays, youngsters hooked with their mobile phones, some people opine that heavy use of phones put adverse effect on their study skills or some are against it. There has been a considerable debate on the issue whether usage of mobile phone is excess has detrimental impact on teenager's reading and writting skills or not. To commence with, I entirly agree with this notion, cell phones have deleterious effect on teenager's literacy skills. Firstly, when they chatt with their friends, then sometimes they write wrong words, but auto correction help them to correct their words and they often do not read their words. Moreover, teenagers prefer slang language while chatting with their family and friends, which is not appropriate for writting skills. For instance, instade of using proper words, they use their shot forms such as WLC, IDK and so on and sometimes they also use these words in their conversation. However, it is believed that using smart phones have some merits such as there are numerious apps which can students inhance their vocabulary, speaking and reading which proof as boon for their studies. For example, a boy how live in rurar area and their nearby has no book store, so he can read e-book rather than going far away from their home. To conclude, different people have different notions regarding this statement but I have sound reasons to advocate that Althoug, usage of mobiles have some advantages but, we can not overlooked their drawbacks, so teenagers should use their mobile phones according to their needs rather than always glued to it.
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many
electronic gadgets
are invented
. Nowadays, youngsters hooked with their mobile
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phones
,
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some
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people
opine that heavy
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use
of
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phones
put adverse effect on their study
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skills
or
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some
are against it. There has been a considerable debate on the issue whether usage of mobile
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phone
is excess has detrimental impact on
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teenager
's reading and
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writting
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skills
or not.

To commence with, I
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entirly
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agree
with this notion, cell
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phones
have deleterious effect on
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teenager
's literacy
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skills
.
Firstly
, when they
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chatt
with their friends, then
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sometimes
they write
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wrong
words,
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but
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auto correction
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help
them to correct their
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words and
they
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often
do not read their words.
Moreover
,
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teenagers
prefer slang language while chatting with their family and friends, which is not appropriate for
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writting
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skills
.
For instance
,
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instade
of using proper words, they
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use
their shot forms such as
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WLC
, IDK and
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so
on and
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sometimes
they
also
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use
these words in their conversation.

However
, it
is believed
that using smart
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phones
have
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some
merits such as there are
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numerious
apps which can students
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inhance
their vocabulary, speaking and reading which proof as boon for their studies.
For example
, a boy how
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live
in
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rurar
area and their nearby has no book store,
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so
he can read e-book
rather
than going far away from their home.

To conclude
,
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different
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people
have
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different
notions regarding this statement
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but
I have sound reasons to advocate that
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Althoug
, usage of mobiles have
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some
advantages
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but
, we can not
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overlooked
their drawbacks,
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so
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teenagers
should
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use
their mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
according to their needs
rather
than always glued to it.
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IELTS essay With the advent of cutting edge technology many electronic

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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