Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. do you think this is a positive or negative development?

With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. do you think this is a positive or negative development? xm0Y1
There has been much discussion revolving around whether the role of outdoor spaces significant or insignificant in our day to day life. There are arguments on both sides. In this essay, I will portrait the drawbacks of the lack of outdoor area and it's implications on personal life is more vital, when compared to the benefits. Nowadays people are leading a stressful life due to their overtime work schedules, attacking deadlines, etc. , and it is important for them to involve in various recreational activities like running, cycling, walking and so on. Therefore, all the physical activities help them to overcome sedentary lifestyle and improve the health conditions. In addition to this, the unavailability of outdoor space directly affects the mental and physical growth of the children who are residing inside a big city. The open space and fresh air have notable role in moulding their skills and abilities. Therefore, the small recreational space creates more insecurities among our kids and they try to indulge with smart devices to play games and have fun from numerous videos. Consequently, it generates addiction in their mind and kills the thinking capacity of the kids. Furthermore, no outdoor space may cause the reduction of socialisation between individuals, even though they are sharing the same boundary, which makes city dweller's life further complicated and isolated. On the contrary, the population in cities are increasing in an alarming rate and which causes detrimental changes in the living pattern of the inhabitats. The absence of outdoor area is creating a positive impact when comes to the city planning. Many people found it very difficult to hold a space to live inside the city due to the overcrowding. As a result, the areas are equally divided to set up the homes to accommodate more individuals in a congested area. Moreover, it also helps the government bodies to ensure the safety and convenience of different people without showing any inequalities. In conclusion, even though insignificant outdoor area has noteworthy role in city planning and execution, in my view, it contributes negative influence among the personal growth of the new numerous city inhabitats.
There has been much discussion revolving around whether the role of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spaces
significant or insignificant in our
It appears that two hyphens are missing.
day to day
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. There are arguments on both sides. In this essay, I
The word 'portrait' is a noun or an adjective. A verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here, or maybe a comma is missing.
will portrait
the drawbacks of the lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
and it's implications on personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
is more vital, when compared to the benefits.

Nowadays
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are leading a stressful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
due to their overtime work schedules, attacking deadlines, etc.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
and it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for them to involve in various recreational activities like running, cycling, walking and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
Therefore
, all the physical activities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to overcome sedentary lifestyle and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the health conditions.
In addition
to this, the unavailability of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
directly
affects the mental and physical growth of the children who are residing inside a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
city. The open
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
and fresh air have notable role in
Possible spelling mistake. 'moulding' is British English.
moulding
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and abilities.
Therefore
, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
recreational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
creates more insecurities among our
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
kids and
they try to indulge with smart devices to play games and have fun from numerous videos.
Consequently
, it generates addiction in their mind and kills the thinking capacity of the kids.
Furthermore
, no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
may cause the reduction of
Possible spelling mistake. 'socialisation' is British English.
socialisation
between individuals,
even though
they are sharing the same boundary, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
city dweller's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
further
complicated and isolated.

On the contrary
, the population in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
are increasing in an alarming rate and which causes detrimental
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the living pattern of the
Possible spelling mistake found.
inhabitats
. The absence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
is creating a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impact when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to the city planning.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
found it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult to hold a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
space
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
inside the city due to the overcrowding.
As a result
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
are
equally
divided to set up the homes to accommodate more individuals in a congested
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
.
Moreover
, it
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
bodies to ensure the safety and convenience of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
without showing any inequalities.

In conclusion
,
even though
insignificant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
has noteworthy role in city planning and execution, in my view, it contributes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
influence among the personal growth of the new numerous city
Possible spelling mistake found.
inhabitats
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. do you think this is a positive or negative development?