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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitats an some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitats an some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem? KXyN

It is beyond a shadow of a doubt that the animal population has been negatively impacted not onlybecause of poaching and forest destruction, butalso because of a surge in urbanization, and due to these activities various species of animals are on the brink of extinction. Hence, preventing such animals from extinction is of utmost importance. Several methods need to be used(taken into consideration) to mitigate this issue. One of the fundamental cause, why such wonderful but endangered animals(need to be shielded) require protection is to maintain an equilibrium(balance) between an ecosystem cycle(ecological community). For example, a herbivore (plant-eating) species are dependent on plants for food supply which is later consumed by carnivores, parallel it will balance the life-cycle of natural inhabitants. If any amongst these species are at the risk of extinction then it may disturb the process of holding every natural component together. Hence, it is cruel to destroy these creatures and one should always emphasize preserving their lives instead. To address the underlying(basic) solutions to overcome this problem, firstly strict legal laws should be imposed on committing illegal hunting for human benefits. Several tigers, for instance, are illegally shot for their skins and bones which can be sold to maketomoney. Thus, by adhering to these laws people might feel reluctant to kill them. Secondly, providing them with a natural dwelling in the form of a zoo as a replacement for utilizing their habitation for urban development can reduce the death ratio which is generally caused due to losing their territory. Therefore, replacing the living environment with an artificial wildlife park might help to multiply (increase exponentially) the existing number of animals. To conclude, human beings risk animal survival to fulfill their materialistic requirements. Having said that, attempts to preserve these disappearing species is necessary to run the biological-clock of life and it can be achieved by enforcing certain rules before they vanish from the planet

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, are illegally
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. Thus
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 might feel reluctant to kill them. Secondly
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reduce
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help
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) the existing number of animals.

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 survival to fulfill their materialistic requirements. Having said that, attempts to preserve these disappearing species is necessary to run the biological-clock of life and it can be achieved
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