Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

why people prefer to go through several cosmetic surgeries? give some reasons of why people are undergoing these procedures and are their any benefit or disadvantages related to it?

why people prefer to go through several cosmetic surgeries? give some reasons of why people are undergoing these procedures and are their any benefit or disadvantages related to it? 7k0b
Nowadays, cosmetic surgeries have become increasingly popular among celebrities as well as common people. Firstly, this essay will discuss the reasons behind these phenomena including mimic the celebrities and enhancement of their looking. Secondly, this essay will demonstrate the advantages and disadvantages of this matter. On the one hand, the main reason why persons prefer to expose themselves to such procedure is that normal people are influenced by a celebrity’s style and their look. Furthermore, some people are having some issues that affect their look like overweight. For instance, BBC News reported that a man with 400 kg has done a cosmetic procedure to reduce his weight. Therefore, the majority of people put themselves under such surgeries just to be like their favourite celebrity. On the other hand, exposing to cosmetic procedures has benefits and disadvantages on the people themselves and their families. The greatest disadvantages of this kind of procedures are that people put themselves under colossal risk if the results of the procedure have not as expected. The NNC News published that 2 per cent of these surgeries have ended with bad results. Obviously, this kind of procedure is to benefit the people whose facing issue with his look. Hence, many doctors advice to not undergoes of these procedures unless there is a major reason. In conclusion, every yare a plethora of people are exposing themselves to cosmetic surgeries. This essay has discussed the reasons behind this phenomenon. This essay also has illustrated the benefits and the disadvantages such procedures.
Nowadays,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cosmetic
surgeries have become
increasingly
popular among celebrities
as well
as common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
Firstly
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
essay
will discuss the reasons behind these phenomena including mimic the celebrities and enhancement of their looking.
Secondly
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
essay
will demonstrate the advantages and disadvantages of this matter.

On the one hand, the main reason why persons prefer to expose themselves to such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedure
is that normal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are influenced
by a celebrity’s style and their look.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
issues that affect their look like overweight.
For instance
, BBC News reported that a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
with 400 kg has done a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cosmetic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedure
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
his weight.
Therefore
, the majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
put themselves under such surgeries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
to be like their
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
celebrity.

On the other hand
, exposing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cosmetic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedures
has benefits and disadvantages on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
themselves and their families. The greatest disadvantages of this kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedures
are that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
put themselves under colossal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
if the results of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedure
have not as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
. The
Possible spelling mistake found.
NNC
News published that 2 per cent of these surgeries have ended with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
results.
Obviously
, this kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedure
is to benefit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
whose facing issue with his look.
Hence
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
doctors advice to not undergoes of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedures
unless there is a major reason.

In conclusion
, every
Possible spelling mistake found.
yare
a plethora of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are exposing themselves to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cosmetic
surgeries. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
essay
has discussed the reasons behind this phenomenon. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
essay
also
has illustrated the benefits and the disadvantages such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
procedures
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay why people prefer to go through several cosmetic surgeries? give some reasons of why people are undergoing these procedures and are their any benefit or disadvantages related to it?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts