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Why do I celebrate my birthday and how I celebrate my birth day

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I bone on 2007 February 13th. I celebrate my birth day because I come to this world on that day. My father and my mother were very happy. And my grandmother also. Now I am 12 years old. at this year I celebrated my birth day with my family members and my friends. That day we played lot. My mother made lots of sweets, rolls, cutlets, drinks and many other things. We went to cake shop and we bought a beautiful chocolate icing cake before the party. Parents organized the party at the home. I had many gifts from them. I was surprised look them. Special gift from my loving nanga. we enjoyed that party time. Thanks for these my family members.
I bone on 2007 February 13th. I celebrate my birth day
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to this world on that day. My father and my mother were
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happy. And my grandmother
also
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I am 12 years
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this year I celebrated my birth day with my family members and my friends. That day we played lot. My mother made lots of sweets, rolls, cutlets, drinks and
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many
other things. We went to cake
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shop and
we
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bought
a
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beautiful
chocolate icing cake
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before
the party. Parents organized the party at the home. I had
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many
gifts from them. I
was surprised
look them. Special gift from my loving
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nanga
.
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we
enjoyed that party time. Thanks for
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IELTS essay Why do I celebrate my birthday and how I celebrate my birth day

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
122 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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