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While supermarkets are gradually famous for people and are built many places, local businesses are opposite.

While supermarkets are gradually famous for people and are built many places, local businesses are opposite. lxnmK
While supermarkets are gradually famous for people and are built many places, local businesses are opposite. It is argued that the public’s collapse is the result from this bad case of local businesses. Personally, the exist of local businesses helps the residents to improve the life effectively. Granted, for individuals, although supermarket has almost furniture for people to buy without going many places, the goods is not various and guaranteed the quality of produces. Therefore, these produces may threat the healthy life of residents. In addition, for society supermarket does not have experts dedicating to any fields of the goods. Thus, it cannot connect with companies in other countries to import high quality goods and contribute to the improvement of country. From that, the life of citizens and the development of country will slowly and hardly. In the other hand, local businesses major in their field such as clothes, shoes, mobile phone and among others. Therefore, there are counsellors who are willing to help choose a suitable produce the condition and the situation of consumers. With this interview, people can save money while buying worth goods. Furthermore, local businesses contribute a lot of knowledge to country. This is because local businesses have more experience and advice in their area and they continue to absorb more knowledge in all the world. This contribution will help to show the progress clearly and quickly. In conclusion, although supermarkets are convenient in many aspects, local businesses are far exceeded than it. Local businesses benefit local communities specifically and permanently.
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gradually
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famous
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people
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are built
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many
places,
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local
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businesses
are opposite. It
is argued
that the public’s collapse is the result from this
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bad
case of
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local
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businesses
.
Personally
,
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the exist
of
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local
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businesses
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helps
the residents to
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improve
the life
effectively
.

Granted, for individuals, although supermarket has almost furniture for
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people
to
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buy
without going
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many
places, the
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goods
is not various and guaranteed the quality of produces.
Therefore
, these produces may threat the healthy life of residents.
In addition
, for society supermarket does not have experts dedicating to any fields of the
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goods
.
Thus
, it cannot connect with
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companies
in other
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countries
to import high quality
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goods
and contribute to the improvement of
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country
. From that, the life of citizens and the development of
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country
will
slowly
and
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hardly
.

In the other hand,
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local
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businesses
major in their field such as clothes, shoes, mobile phone and among others.
Therefore
, there are
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counsellors
who are willing to
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help
choose a suitable produce the condition and the situation of consumers. With this interview,
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people
can save money while buying worth
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goods
.
Furthermore
,
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local
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businesses
contribute
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a lot of
knowledge to
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country
. This is
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because
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local
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businesses
have more experience and advice in their
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area and
they continue to absorb more knowledge in all the world. This contribution will
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help
to
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show
the progress
clearly
and
quickly
.

In conclusion
, although supermarkets are convenient in
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many
aspects,
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local
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businesses
are far exceeded than it.
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Local
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businesses
benefit
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local
communities
specifically
and
permanently
.
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IELTS essay While supermarkets are gradually famous for people and are built many places, local businesses are opposite.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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