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While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.8

While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. v. 8
Today, many environmental problems need to be solve worldwide. This problems such as increase in the Earth' s temperature and deforestation. Some people believe that global warming is much more detrimental, while others argue that deforestation is a major issue that needs to be solve first. In this essay, both sides will be weighed prior to reaching a conclusion. It is felt by many that global warming absolutely plays a vital role in our planet' s destruction. Scientists speculate that the ice in the North and South pole were starting to melt due to global warming that will lead to a chain reaction of problems. Such as increase in the Earth' s water level and a terrible lost of habitats of polar animals. They also suggest that El Nino phenomenon will be frequently experienced in the next coming years. It is really obvious that global warming is a huge participant in killing our planet not only today but in the future. On the other hand, some says that deforestation is a main concern that we must pay our attention to. Since the trees are responsible in making our world alive. Deforestation would result to some disastrous events like landslides, high concentration of carbon dioxide in the air and tremendous flood events. This will be experienced especially to those countries that does not have a strict law on proper logging. To conclude, while deforestation result could result in catastrophic events, I believe that global warming is much more of a dilemma. Deforestation might be solved by having a firmer policy on logging and by continuously replacing the trees that were cut. While with global warming has a huge difference. Solutions are still being figured out and the results might be much worse than what scientists expect.
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environmental problems need to be
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solve
worldwide.
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problems such as increase in the
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Earth&
#039; s temperature and
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deforestation
.
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Some
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people
believe that
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global
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warming
is much more detrimental, while others argue that
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deforestation
is a major issue that needs to be
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solve
first
. In this essay, both sides will
be weighed
prior to reaching a conclusion.

It
is felt
by
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many
that
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global
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warming
absolutely
plays a vital role in our
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planet&
#039; s destruction. Scientists speculate that the ice in the North and
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South pole
were starting to melt due to
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global
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warming
that will lead to a chain reaction of problems. Such as increase in the
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Earth&
#039; s water level and a terrible lost of habitats of polar animals. They
also
suggest that
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El Nino
phenomenon will be
frequently
experienced in the
next
coming years. It is
really
obvious that
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global
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warming
is a huge participant in killing our planet not
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today
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in the future.

On the other hand
,
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some
says that
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deforestation
is a main concern that we
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must
pay our attention to.
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would
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result
to
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disastrous
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events
like landslides, high concentration of carbon dioxide in the air and tremendous flood
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events
. This will
be experienced
especially
to those countries that does not have a strict law on proper logging.

To conclude
, while
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deforestation
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result
could
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result
in catastrophic
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events
, I believe that
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global
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warming
is much more of a dilemma.
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Deforestation
might
be solved
by having a firmer policy on logging and by
continuously
replacing the trees that were
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cut
.
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While
with
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global
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warming
has a huge difference. Solutions are
still
being figured
out and the
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results
might be much worse than what scientists
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expect
.
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IELTS essay While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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