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Which of the two do you consider more important: security or freedom and independence?

Which of the two do you consider more important: security or freedom and independence? 7aLRn
Nowadays, due to the advancement of our society, the career choices for individuals are unlimited. But, this arises the question as to what each person will pick for his future. Will he choose the easy and secure way, or the option that allows them to be independent and free? In my opinion, they must follow their passion, although in this essay, I will discuss both views. Firstly, in order to have a standard and secure career, you do not give yourself the opportunity to unlock your full potential, limiting your future prospects. Moreover, this choice of activity, can have negative consequences on your mental health. To illustrate, from my own experience, working in my father’s restaurant, because it’s a sure job, I feel undervalued and oppressed. In contrast, taking the chance of a job you truly desire, can offer you a happier life. By taking the risk of a course you want, you give yourself the chance to prosper and to significantly broaden your horizons. Therefore, you take advantage of your capabilities and are a step closer to a mentally and physically, balanced growth. For example, the University of Cambridge surveyed UK workers and found out that, people that like their job in contrast to one’s that don’t, are 40% happier about their life. Finally, the only drawback regarding this, is the risk of not succeeding. Taking everything into consideration, picking a career is a difficult choice for all of us. But, one should consider his happiness and personal development, rather than an easy road which may lead to an unpleasant future.
Nowadays, due to the advancement of our society, the career choices for individuals
are unlimited
.
But
, this arises the question as to what each person will pick for his future. Will he choose the easy and secure way, or the option that
allows
them to be independent and free? In my opinion, they
must
follow their passion, although in this essay, I will discuss both views.

Firstly
, in order to have a standard and secure career, you do not give yourself the opportunity to unlock your full potential, limiting your future prospects.
Moreover
, this choice of activity, can have
negative
consequences on your mental health. To illustrate, from my
own
experience, working in my father’s restaurant,
because
it’s a sure job, I feel undervalued and oppressed.
In contrast
, taking the chance of a job you
truly
desire, can offer you a happier life.

By taking the
risk
of a course you want, you give yourself the chance to prosper and to
significantly
broaden your horizons.
Therefore
, you take advantage of your capabilities and are a step closer to a mentally and
physically
, balanced growth.
For example
, the University of Cambridge surveyed UK workers and found out that,
people
that like their job
in contrast
to one’s that don’t, are 40% happier about their life.
Finally
, the
only
drawback regarding this, is the
risk
of not succeeding.

Taking everything into consideration, picking a career is a difficult choice for all of us.
But
, one should consider his happiness and personal development,
rather
than an easy road which may lead to an unpleasant future.
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IELTS essay Which of the two do you consider more important: security or freedom and independence?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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