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When did courage fail you?

When did courage fail you? 0BpN9
Being courageous all the time isn't helpful because it may not favour one to be courageous at certain situations. Being courageous has not only failed me once, it has failed me many times. One of those times was when I went on a trek organised by my school. My friend had lost his bottle somewhere in the boulders. We went looking for it immediately. Ten minutes later my friend spotted it stuck between the boulders. Without hesitation I ran across the boulders to get it. Suddenly I slipped by the edge of a boulder and fell from a height of 1. 5 meters with a thorn bush stuck in my cheek. You may say I didn't pay enough attention to my surroundings. but I would not have taken the decision to run across the boulders without second thought.
Being courageous all the time isn't helpful
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because
it may not
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favour
one to be courageous at certain situations. Being courageous has not
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only
failed me once, it has failed me
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many
times. One of those times was when I went on a trek
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organised
by my school. My friend had lost his bottle somewhere in the boulders. We went looking for it immediately. Ten minutes later my friend spotted it stuck between the boulders. Without
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hesitation I
ran across the boulders to
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get
it.
Suddenly
I slipped by the edge of a boulder and fell from a height of 1. 5 meters with a thorn bush stuck in my cheek. You may say I didn't pay
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enough
attention to my surroundings.
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but
I would not have taken the decision to run across the boulders without second
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thought
.

IELTS essay When did courage fail you?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
138 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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