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Do you prefer to go to the local branch of your bank, or to use the internet or the telephone? Why? Why do you think most customers still prefer to go to the bank?

Do you prefer to go to the local branch of your bank, or to use the internet or the telephone? Why? Why do you think most customers still prefer to go to the bank? GWlQe
As can be seen, the establishment of multiple banks in Vietnam provides numerous benefits to both businesses and individuals. While I prefer to use the internet banking service, the majority of people still choose to conduct their business at a bank. There are several reasons why I choose to use the online banking service instead of visiting a local bank. Firstly, the bank I use is located far from my house, so going there will take a long time. Secondly, despite having my own bank account, I seldom make transactions and most of them can be done online. For example, I transferred 20000 VND to my friend via internet banking because she helped me print some assignments. It just took me a few minutes and simple steps to complete the transaction. Thirdly, many banks encourage clients to use online services by offering incentives or promotions, which enticed me to use online banking. On the other hand, doing transactions at the bank gives certain benefits that a major part of customers select. Individuals or businesses conduct transactions at the bank rather than online because it is more trustworthy. Numerous customers have been defrauded via the internet, resulting in significant financial losses. Furthermore, firms must deal with bank employees to get certified paperwork with a bank signature, which cannot be done online. To sum up, either making transactions on the internet or conducting at the bank gives undeniable advantages for customers.
As can be
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seen
, the establishment of multiple
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banks
in Vietnam provides numerous benefits to both businesses and individuals. While I prefer to
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use
the internet banking service, the majority of
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people
still
choose to conduct their business at a bank.

There are several reasons why I choose to
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use
the
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online
banking service
instead
of visiting a local
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bank
.
Firstly
, the
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bank
I
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use
is located
far from my
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house
,
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so
going there will take a long time.
Secondly
, despite having my
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own
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bank
account, I seldom
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make
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transactions
and most of them can
be done
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online
.
For example
, I transferred 20000 VND to my friend via internet banking
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because
she
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helped
me print
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some
assignments. It
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just
took me a few minutes and simple steps to complete the
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transaction
.
Thirdly
,
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many
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banks
encourage clients to
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use
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online
services by offering incentives or promotions, which enticed me to
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use
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online
banking.

On the other hand
, doing
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transactions
at the
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bank
gives certain benefits that a major part of customers select. Individuals or businesses conduct
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transactions
at the
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bank
rather
than
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online
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because
it is more trustworthy. Numerous customers have
been defrauded
via the internet, resulting in significant financial losses.
Furthermore
, firms
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must
deal with
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bank
employees to
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get
certified paperwork with a
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bank
signature, which cannot
be done
online.

To sum up, either making
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transactions
on the internet or conducting at the
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bank
gives undeniable advantages for customers.
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IELTS essay Do you prefer to go to the local branch of your bank, or to use the internet or the telephone? Why? Why do you think most customers still prefer to go to the bank?

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