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What you would to have change the world

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Our world is not perfect, you must agree. Suppose I had the opportunity to change the world the way I wanted. First, I would solve environmental problems, improve the air by planting trees. Then I would destroy all the rubbish on our planet. Second, I would be concerned about the number of people. I would reduce the birth rate so that one girl couldn’t have more than two children. Third, I would restore the animal population by creating nature reserves. Fourth, I would clean up all the oceans, seas, and lakes; that would benefit fish and people. I could also stop wars and crime by reducing people's desire to do evil. And I would put a barrier around the planet to protect against meteorites. That's all for now
Our world is not perfect, you
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must
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agree
.

Suppose I had the opportunity to
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change
the world the way I wanted.

First
, I would solve environmental problems,
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improve
the air by planting trees.

Then I would
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destroy
all the rubbish on our planet.

Second, I would
be concerned
about the number of
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people
.

I would
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reduce
the birth rate
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so
that one girl couldn’t have more than two children.

Third, I would restore the animal population by creating nature reserves.

Fourth, I would clean up all the oceans, seas, and lakes; that would benefit fish and
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people
.

I could
also
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stop
wars and crime by reducing
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people
's desire to do evil.

And I would put a barrier around the planet to protect against meteorites.

That's all for
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now
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IELTS essay What you would to have change the world

Essay
  American English
11 paragraphs
127 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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