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What makes a successful person

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Success is known by the amount of money and materials you earn; I believe that now a day you are only known as a successful person if you have enough money to buy all your needs. Passion is a must because if you will do the work your interest in you will find a way to gain promotion on our job. Money now a day is the only thing that helps you on your bad days so that’s why you should earn as much money as possible because success means you can afford everything you need and you can only afford it if you have enough money that’s why you should think of a job where you can earn money as much no matter if the job is not an office job. You are also known as a successful person if you have a good house to live in and if you have your own property. The reason behind a successful person is the hard work he does and on how dedicated is he or she to his or her job and on how he tackles the work that is given to the specific person for example: If you enjoy your work, you will finish it in a good way and make the work like no one can make it better than you in your group. I believe if you have enough money to afford all you need that is what we called a successful person. Success is only gained by doing hard work at an early age while other youngsters are having fun you should think about your future and start working on a job and savings.
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by the amount of
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money
and materials you earn; I believe that
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a day you are
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known as a
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successful
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person
if you have
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enough
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money
to
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buy
all your needs. Passion is a
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must
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because
if you will do the
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work
your interest in you will find a way to gain promotion on our job.

Money
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now
a day is the
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thing that
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helps
you on your
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bad
days
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so
that’s why you should earn as much
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money
as possible
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because
success means you can afford everything you need and you can
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only
afford it if you have
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enough
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money
that’s why you should
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think
of a
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job
where you can earn
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money
as much no matter if the
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job
is not an office
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job
. You are
also
known as a
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successful
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person
if you have a
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good
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house
to
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live
in and if you have your
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own
property.

The reason behind a
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successful
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person
is the
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hard
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work
he does and on how dedicated is he or she to
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his or her
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job
and on how he tackles the
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work
that is
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given
to the specific
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person
for example
: If you enjoy your
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work
, you will finish it in a
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good
way and
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make
the
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work
like no one can
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make
it better than you in your group. I believe if you have
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enough
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money
to afford all you need
that is
what we called a
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successful
person.

Success is
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only
gained by doing
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hard
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work
at an early age while other youngsters are having fun you should
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think
about your future and
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start
working on a
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job
and savings.

IELTS essay What makes a successful person

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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