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What is your name? Discuss its advantage and disadvantage

What is your name? Discuss its advantage and disadvantage 6d8BK
Almost all the museums, take a fee for admission whereas other expenses are charge less. Despite, by charging a fee, the museums could collect good amount of money but due to charge many people are also avoiding visiting museums. In my opinion, there arise a lot of disadvantages for taking charges with people. Firstly, the museum is a place where antiques, valuable as well as materials reflecting traditional values are kept. Through the museum, we could understand the history of any place. So, if museums charge high for admission fee then due to an admission cost, people don’t want to go to the museum, instead they use that money for any other entertainment purpose. And they can’t get valuable information about their nation. Similarly, as we all know if the admission charge is free then many tourists would also visit the museum, and they can know the history of our nation as well as customs and tradition of the nation. If, they find it interesting then they would just write an article after returning to their nation from which the history of our nation could also be famous in their nation and it encourages many people to visit that nation. For instance, due to free charge, many Nepalese as well as tourists visit different museums of Nepal. Some tourists find the Nepalese history fascinating, and they just wrote a book regarding Nepal. Such books could be found in the library of India and the UK as well. To conclude, in my opinion, although the charges for museum can generate an income but, people won’t get any knowledge regarding that nation. So, the admission fee must be cut out rather than charging.
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museums
, take a
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for
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admission
whereas other expenses are
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charge
less. Despite, by charging a
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fee
, the
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museums
could collect
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good
amount of money
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but
due to
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charge
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many
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people
are
also
avoiding visiting
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museums
. In my opinion, there arise
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a lot of
disadvantages for taking
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charges
with
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people
.

Firstly
, the
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museum
is a place where antiques, valuable
as well
as materials reflecting traditional values are
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kept
. Through the
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museum
, we could understand the
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history
of any place.
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So
, if
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museums
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charge
high for
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admission
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fee
then due to an
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admission
cost,
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people
don’t want to go to the
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museum
,
instead
they
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use
that money for any other entertainment purpose. And they can’t
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get
valuable information about their nation.

Similarly
, as we all know if the
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admission
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charge
is free then
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many
tourists would
also
visit the
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museum
, and they can know the
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history
of our
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nation
as well
as customs and tradition of the
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nation
. If, they find it interesting then they would
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just
write an article after returning to their
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nation
from which the
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history
of our
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nation
could
also
be
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famous
in their
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nation
and it encourages
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many
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people
to visit that
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nation
.
For instance
, due to free
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charge
,
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many
Nepalese
as well
as tourists visit
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different
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museums
of Nepal.
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Some
tourists find the Nepalese
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history
fascinating, and they
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just
wrote a book regarding Nepal. Such books could
be found
in the library of India and the UK
as well
.

To conclude
, in my opinion, although the
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charges
for
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museum
can generate an income
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but
,
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people
won’t
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get
any knowledge regarding that
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nation
.
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So
, the
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admission
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fee
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must
be
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cut
out
rather
than charging.
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IELTS essay What is your name? Discuss its advantage and disadvantage

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  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
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