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What is the main reason for your application for the programme? In what way do you believe you are going to benefit from it? In what way do you believe you will be able to contribute to the programme?

What is the main reason for your application for the programme? In what way do you believe you are going to benefit from it? In what way do you believe you will be able to contribute to the programme? yXx5g
Although, I may have an inherent aptitude to learn and improve knowledge. We live in a world where the future is uncertain. Therefore, the world belongs to innovators and creators. The study of this program serves as an excellent foundation for various types of innovative and creative ideas. The reason for applying this program is twofold. Firstly, this program benefits me because it teaches me to cultivate unique skills and thinking out of the box. The skills learned from this program generally apply to all areas of industry and do not kill creativity or block the opportunity to a specific career. Secondly, this program teaches me that risk is something natural and I have to live with it and manage it. This program fosters my personality traits like risk-taking and persistence. Thirdly, having 10 years of relevant experience in the field of accounting and finance in the yarn and education sectors, the power of knowledge seems to call me out pursuing me to seek more. The dream I nurtured during my graduation has grown with me and to make this reality I intend to pursue Masters in Entrepreneurship, sustainability and social change at your esteemed university. In Pakistan, I have joined one of the top textile industry named as Al-Burhan elastomeric to attain global knowledge as this company was mainly working with International clients. I made interaction with the clients by emailing the invoices and vouchers to them. The company trained me global procurement and granted me promotion as finance executive which I consider as major influence on me for getting knowledge in this specific degree. Currently I strive to enhance my knowledge and motivation skills. I know these are important attributes for leaders in the company. The contribution of any program is quite a challenging question. But after completing this program will trigger entrepreneurial competencies through learning-by-doing activities. This program will develop competencies like self-efficacy, self-insight, political skills, entrepreneurial identity etc. Additionally, After completing my education, I plan to come back to serve my country through new modes and technology acquired from this program. There is no reason to stay any longer in your country after completing my education as I want the people of my country to benefit from my knowledge and skills.
Although, I may have an inherent aptitude to learn and
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improve
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knowledge
. We
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live
in a world where the future is uncertain.
Therefore
, the world belongs to innovators and creators. The study of this
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program
serves as an excellent foundation for various types of innovative and creative
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ideas
. The reason for applying this
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program
is twofold.
Firstly
, this
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program
benefits me
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because
it teaches me to cultivate unique
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skills
and thinking out of the box. The
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skills
learned from this
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program
generally
apply to all areas of industry and do not kill creativity or block the opportunity to a specific career.
Secondly
, this
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program
teaches me that
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risk
is something natural and I
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have to
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live
with it and manage it. This
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program
fosters my personality traits like
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risk
-taking and persistence.

Thirdly
, having 10 years of relevant experience in the field of accounting and finance in the yarn and education sectors, the power of
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knowledge
seems to call me out pursuing me to seek more. The dream I nurtured during my graduation has grown with me and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
this reality I intend to pursue Masters in Entrepreneurship, sustainability and social
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change
at your esteemed university. In Pakistan, I have
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joined
one of the top textile industry named as
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Al-Burhan
elastomeric to attain global
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knowledge
as this
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company
was
mainly
working with International clients. I made interaction with the clients by emailing the invoices and vouchers to them. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
trained me global procurement and granted me promotion as finance executive which I consider as major influence on me for getting
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knowledge
in this specific degree.
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Currently
I strive to enhance my
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knowledge
and motivation
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skills
. I know these are
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important
attributes for leaders in the
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company
.

The contribution of any
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program
is quite a challenging question.
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But
after completing this
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program
will trigger entrepreneurial competencies through learning-by-doing activities. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
will develop competencies like self-efficacy, self-insight, political
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skills
, entrepreneurial identity etc.
Additionally
, After completing my education, I plan to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back to serve my country through new modes and technology acquired from this
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program
. There is no reason to stay any longer in your country after completing my education as I want the
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people
of my country to benefit from my
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knowledge
and
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skills
.
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IELTS essay What is the main reason for your application for the programme? In what way do you believe you are going to benefit from it? In what way do you believe you will be able to contribute to the programme?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
375 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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