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What activities have you been involved in that have helped you or others overcome barriers while pursuing an interest in STEM learning?

What activities have you been involved in that have helped you or others overcome barriers while pursuing an interest in STEM learning? xm8n1
My Grandfather and my uncle were engineers. So, in a sense, I was inspired to become an engineer from my childhood. I never seriously thought of pursuing any other career and I have participated in many science competitions in my school which helped me to develop more interest in science and technology. Moreover, I am very interested in creating new things probably new inventions with existing things in my surroundings. As the years passed this interest shifted to the field of robotics and coding robots. Coding and Robotics enabled me to learn Scratch Programming, which is specifically designed for young students learning. I used to develop some basic games from different websites which boosted my confidence levels, but also induce interest in STEM subjects. Apart from that, Educational Tours to Science Exhibition made me curious by nature, tours to museums/exhibitions have motivated me to pursue STEM subjects. Learn new things from different science books and working on projects undoubtedly made me pursue an interest in STEM learning.
My Grandfather and my uncle were engineers.
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So
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was inspired
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seriously
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thought
of pursuing any other career and I have participated in
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many
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science
competitions in my school which
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helped
me to develop more
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interest
in
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science
and technology.
Moreover
, I am
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very
interested in creating new things
probably
new inventions with existing things in my surroundings. As the years passed this
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interest
shifted to the field of robotics and coding robots. Coding and Robotics enabled me to learn Scratch Programming, which is
specifically
designed for young students learning. I
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used
to develop
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some
basic games from
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different
websites which boosted my confidence levels,
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but
also
induce
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interest
in STEM subjects.

Apart from that, Educational Tours to
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Science
Exhibition made me curious by nature, tours to museums/exhibitions have motivated me to pursue STEM subjects. Learn new things from
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different
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science
books and working on projects
undoubtedly
made me pursue an
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interest
in STEM learning.

IELTS essay What activities have you been involved in that have helped you or others overcome barriers while pursuing an interest in STEM learning?

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