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We should pay more attention to advertising.

We should pay more attention to advertising. 2bXE6
I often feel the effectiveness of advertising. Especially, I feel it strongly when using SNS. For example, if I see an advertising that appears during an Instagram stories or something that is been talked about on Tiktok, I will quickly want it. Just the other day, I bought facial cleansing products and cosmetics that were talked about at Tiktok. It was a hot topic, and I was happy when I bought its, and they were comfortable to use. However, I also thought that I wasted a little money because I bought too much because I wanted its. I think that this is also the danger of advertising. Advertising tends to write big advantages and small disadvantages so that we want to buy a product. If we overlook the disadvantages, we may think that the product is different from what we expected when it arrived, or we may be harmed by using it. In the worst case, we may be changed a high fee, so you should really be careful about advertising. Therefore, when we are interested in an advertising product, we should carefully look at the reviews, think about whether we really need it, and think about the disadvantages. By doing so, I think we can prevent wasting money and bad fraud as much as possible. The other day, I should have bought the product by looking at more reviews and looking at the financial aspects. In the future, I will try to live with proper attention, without being confused by the persuasiveness of advertising or being bound by the generality of advertising.
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often
feel the effectiveness of advertising.
Especially
, I feel it
strongly
when using SNS.
For example
, if I
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see
an advertising that appears during an Instagram stories or something that
is been
talked about on
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Tiktok
, I will
quickly
want it.
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Just
the other day, I
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bought
facial cleansing
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products
and cosmetics that
were talked
about at
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Tiktok
. It was a hot topic, and I was happy when I
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bought
its, and they were comfortable to
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use
.
However
, I
also
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thought
that I wasted a
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little
money
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because
I
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bought
too much
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because
I wanted its. I
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think
that this is
also
the
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danger
of advertising. Advertising tends to write
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big
advantages and
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small
disadvantages
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so
that we want to
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buy
a
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product
. If we overlook the disadvantages, we may
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think
that the
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product
is
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different
from what we
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expected
when it arrived, or we may
be harmed
by using it. In the worst case, we may be
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changed
a high fee,
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so
you should
really
be careful about advertising.
Therefore
, when we
are interested
in an advertising
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product
, we should
carefully
look at the reviews,
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think
about whether we
really
need it, and
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think
about the disadvantages. By doing
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so
, I
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think
we can
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prevent
wasting money and
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bad
fraud as much as possible. The other day, I should have
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bought
the
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product
by looking at more reviews and looking at the financial aspects. In the future, I will try to
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live
with proper attention, without
being confused
by the persuasiveness of advertising or
being bound
by the generality of advertising.
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IELTS essay We should pay more attention to advertising.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
263 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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