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We hurled stone to the tamarind tree to get the tamarind. When a bunch of tamarinds fell on the ground we went to collect them and somebody hurls stone to the tree again and the stone hit my head. I fell down on the ground and I faint suddenly.

We hurled stone to the tamarind tree to get the tamarind. When a bunch of tamarinds fell on the ground we went to collect them and somebody hurls stone to the tree again and the stone hit my head. I fell down on the ground and I faint suddenly. drrgd

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