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W2, some people think governments should introduce laws regrading what nutrition and food choices to improve public health. others think it is wrong. ( i do not remember the exact words but it is something like that) discuss both views and give your own o

W2, some people think governments should introduce laws regrading what nutrition and food choices to improve public health. others think it is wrong. ( i do not remember the exact words but it is something like that) discuss both views and give your own o dopRo
For the whole world, diverse food is the main choice of every age group. Some people argue that there should be a law of nutrition food to bring healthy lifestyle. While others state that people should have their own choice of food. In this essay, I will contend both views and provide my opinion in support to the later view due to the fact that this law will challenge the democratic rights of people and their way of entertainment. There is no doubt that government laws to impose nutrition food would bring an advantage of healthy lifestyle, less hospitalise and strong generation. Firstly, p. . .
For the whole world, diverse
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food
is the main choice of every age group.
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Some
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people
argue that there should be a law of nutrition
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food
to bring healthy lifestyle.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
others state that
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people
should have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
choice of
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food
. In this essay, I will contend both views and provide my opinion in support to the later view due to the fact that this law will challenge the democratic rights of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and their way of entertainment.

There is no doubt that
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government
laws to impose nutrition
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food
would bring an advantage of healthy lifestyle, less
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hospitalise
and strong generation.
Firstly
, p.
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IELTS essay W2, some people think governments should introduce laws regrading what nutrition and food choices to improve public health. others think it is wrong. ( i do not remember the exact words but it is something like that) discuss both views and give your own o

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  American English
2 paragraphs
106 words
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