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The sample under consideration reveals the information of the visitors to England who travelled four distinct places in Brighton from 1980 to 2010. The data is calibrated in the form pf percentage and given in linear form. The overall analysis suggests that the Pavilion was the most preferable place of the travellers from 1990 to 2010 where as the percentage of the visitors had constantly decreased at the Art gallery during the same time period. Moreover, from 1980 to 2010 the percentage of the travellers remained nearly same who enjoyed the festivals, but the pier gained the tourists attraction from 2005. At the fleeting glance, in 1980 the least preferred place was pier where the travellers percentage was 11 but the festivals got the highest tourist attraction which was tripled then the pier’s travellers. It is vivid that the tourists visited the art gallery the most in 1985 which was measured as near about 40% as compared to the 25% at pavilion, in festivals and upto 10% at Pier. On scrutinizing further, in 1995 the highest proportion of the visitors were measured as 49% at the Pavilion where as the lowest were 10 % at Pier. Futher more, the analysed percentage of the tourists were 25% who preferred the festivals and 20% at Art gallery in 1995. Apart from this, from 2000 to 2010 the percentage of the travellers had escalated from 11% to 21 %. The pavilion remained at the top most loved place by the tourists with the upto 30% in 2010 but on the other hand the Art gallery lost the tourist’s attraction and the data was measured as less then 10% in 2010.
The sample under consideration reveals the information of the visitors to England who travelled four distinct
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places
in Brighton from 1980 to 2010. The data
is calibrated
in the form pf
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percentage
and
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given
in linear form.

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The
overall
analysis suggests that the
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Pavilion
was the most preferable
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place
of the
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travellers
from 1990 to 2010
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where as
the
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percentage
of the visitors had
constantly
decreased at the
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Art
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gallery
during the same time period.
Moreover
, from 1980 to 2010 the
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percentage
of the
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travellers
remained
nearly
same who enjoyed the
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festivals
,
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but
the
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pier
gained the
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tourists
attraction from 2005.

At the fleeting glance, in 1980 the least preferred
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place
was
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pier
where the
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travellers
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percentage
was 11
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but
the
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festivals
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got
the highest
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tourist
attraction which
was tripled
then the
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pier’s
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travellers
. It is vivid that the
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tourists
visited the
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art
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gallery
the most in 1985 which
was measured
as near about 40% as compared to the 25% at
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pavilion
, in
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festivals
and
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upto
10% at Pier.

On scrutinizing
further
, in 1995 the highest proportion of the visitors
were measured
as 49% at the
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Pavilion
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where as
the lowest were 10 % at
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Pier
.
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Futher
more, the
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analysed
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percentage
of the
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tourists
were 25% who preferred the
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festivals
and 20% at
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Art
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gallery
in 1995. Apart from this, from 2000 to 2010 the
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percentage
of the
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travellers
had escalated from 11% to 21 %. The
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pavilion
remained at the top most
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loved
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place
by the
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tourists
with the
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upto
30% in 2010
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but
on the other hand
the
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Art
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gallery
lost the
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tourist’s
attraction and the data
was measured
as less
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then
10% in 2010.
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IELTS essay Visitors to England who travelled to

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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