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Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?

Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. nkAe
Learning the value of Money is very important skill in one's life. During school years, very few children's learn this important skill. This essay will argue why this life skill should be made part of the school curriculum. Firstly, I think if a child know how to value money, he/she will start spending it in more productive way. This on the other hand will help lesser spending on junk food items, less necessary products. Apart from this, if a child knows the value of money and how much struggle and efforts does it take to earn some, they will value their belongings. For instance, Since the days of school I saw my parents struggle and thus, I valued my belongings.
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if a child know how to
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money, he/she will
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spending it in more productive way. This
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lesser spending on junk food items, less necessary products. Apart from this, if a child knows the
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value
of money and how much struggle and efforts does it take to earn
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, they will
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their belongings.
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my parents struggle and
thus
, I valued my belongings.

IELTS essay Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
120 words
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