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Vaccine necessary for children

Vaccine necessary for children NwJp0
Today, Vaccines are necessary for children, it helps them to prevent some dangerous diseases, but it also has unwanted side effects. That is why some people still refuse to vaccinate their children. Personally, I think vaccines bring much greater benefits than letting children develop naturally To be honest, vaccines bring some complications after vaccination such as allergic reactions, emotional disorders and death. Nevaccinatedwspapers sometimes show there were children dying after being. However beside from the rare events that occur, we cannot deny the benefits of vaccination. Today, vaccines have helped prevent children from dangerous diseases like smallpox, tetanus. Especially Thanks to the vaccine, we don't see patients with polio anymore. It is clear that vaccination benefits society In conclusion, prevention is better than cure, so I think parents should give their children all the vaccines required.
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IELTS essay Vaccine necessary for children

Essay
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4 paragraphs
136 words
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