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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Each and every one in this era are entitled to have an education, it doesn’t matter what is your political views, your gender or even your socio-economic status. We are all having this birth right to have a proper and good quality education. Higher education should admit the same population of both genders. In this essay I will provide some support on why I agree with the statement. Having a diploma is the best achievement that one can obtain. Gender cannot dictate on what or until where you can go in this world. For instance, whatever male can do, female can surpass it. There will no limitation to what opposite gender can set their goal. Furthermore, enrolling to any subject are the rights of both sexes. We are not handcuffed by our gender. Another thing, in this time females are able to equal or even overtake the skills and capabilities of men. They are now more independent and they are empowered now a day. Another example is, modern ladies are more gifted on managing corporation, and they use their emotions and their critical thinking to solve or prevent problems. Whit this, I strongly agree that accepting university students are not based on their gender, the total number application of enrollees should be equal. We can now erase the stigma that females are not capable of something base on their sex. We should put in our mind that we are all same, and what the males right is a female right as well.
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Each and every one
in this era
are entitled
to have an education, it doesn’t matter what is your political views, your gender or even your
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socio-economic
status. We are all having this birth
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right
to have a proper and
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good
quality education. Higher education should admit the same population of both genders. In this essay I will provide
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some
support on why I
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agree
with the statement.

Having a diploma is the best achievement that one can obtain. Gender cannot dictate on what or until where you can go in this world.
For instance
, whatever male can do,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
can surpass it. There will no limitation to what opposite gender can set their goal.
Furthermore
, enrolling to any subject are the
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rights
of both sexes. We are not handcuffed by our gender.

Another thing, in this time
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females
are able to equal or even overtake the
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skills
and capabilities of
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men
. They are
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now
more
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independent and
they
are empowered
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now
a day. Another example is, modern ladies are more gifted on managing corporation, and they
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use
their emotions and their critical thinking to solve or
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prevent
problems.

Whit this, I
strongly
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agree
that accepting university students are not based on their gender, the total number application of
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enrollees
should be equal. We can
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now
erase the stigma that
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females
are not capable of something base on their sex. We should put in our mind that we are all same, and what the males
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right
is a
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female
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right
as well
.
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IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.

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4 paragraphs
252 words
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