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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. DR5A
Doubtless, it is to say, that people consuming to much food like pizza, burgers or sweets or often get overweight. Thereby, it is not just a problem to these individuals, it has a great impact to the whole society. Consequently, in contrast to some other opinions, the idea came up to introduce a ‘fat tax’ on these products to change the consumption behaviour. However, this is a controversial issue, which will be discussed in the following essay, ending with my point of view. Firstly, there is to mention, that indeed a significant number of people, especially in the wealthier countries, weigh too much, as they eat very unhealthy food. This causes several problems for themselves, because people, who are overweight, in general, gets more often ill, injured and even die earlier. So, these specific individuals are a considerable pressure to the health care systems, due to a more frequent use of medicaments, doctors and hospital capacities. As a result, it just seems to be logical to eliminate the origin of these risks by a higher pricing of these products. On the other hand, the general introduction of such a ‘fat tax’ would be related to a minority, not to the bigger part of the population, as the most people are able to eat healthy enough not to be overweight. Another factor, which should not be forgotten, is the enormous food economy, like the numerous restaurants with many working places, making pizzas, various burgers or sweet dishes, could be harmed seriously by such an intervention of the government. Furthermore, every person is responsible for their own and if they getting thick and ill, it is also a self-caused problem, with the consequence that they probably have to pay a higher contribution to the health care system. Finally, there are several other opportunities to solve this problem on short as well as on long term. For instance, a permission of these huge amounts of advertisements according to fast food or sweets can purpose a change. In addition, education about healthy eating seems to be a topic of significant importance. In conclusion, weighing up pros and cons, I think to get a successful change in the peoples’ consumption a ‘fat tax’ is the wrong instrument. Special school lessons, for example, are much more effective on long term and may can reverse the current, frightening development. However, at the end every one, except children, who should be taught by their parents, are responsible for their own.
Doubtless, it is to say, that
people
consuming
to
much
food
like pizza, burgers or sweets or
often
get
overweight. Thereby, it is not
just
a
problem
to these individuals, it has a great impact to the whole society.
Consequently
,
in contrast
to
some
other opinions, the
idea
came up to introduce a ‘
fat
tax’ on these products to
change
the consumption
behaviour
.
However
, this is a controversial issue, which will
be discussed
in the following essay, ending with my point of view.

Firstly
, there is to mention, that
indeed
a significant number of
people
,
especially
in the wealthier countries, weigh too much, as they eat
very
unhealthy
food
. This causes several
problems
for themselves,
because
people
, who are overweight,
in general
,
gets
more
often
ill, injured and even
die
earlier.
So
, these specific individuals are a considerable pressure to the health care systems, due to a more frequent
use
of
medicaments
, doctors and hospital capacities.
As a result
, it
just
seems to be logical to eliminate the origin of these
risks
by a higher pricing of these products.

On the other hand
, the general introduction of such a ‘
fat
tax’ would
be related
to a minority, not to the bigger part of the population, as the most
people
are able to eat healthy
enough
not to be overweight. Another factor, which should not
be forgotten
, is the enormous
food
economy, like the numerous restaurants with
many
working places, making pizzas, various burgers or sweet dishes, could
be harmed
seriously
by such an intervention of the
government
.
Furthermore
, every person is responsible for their
own
and if
they getting
thick and ill, it is
also
a self-caused
problem
, with the consequence that they
probably
have to
pay a higher contribution to the health care system.

Finally
, there are several other opportunities to solve this
problem
on short
as well
as on long term.
For instance
, a permission of these huge amounts of advertisements according to
fast
food
or sweets can purpose a
change
.
In addition
, education about healthy eating seems to be a topic of significant importance.

In conclusion
, weighing up pros and cons, I
think
to
get
a successful
change
in the
peoples’
consumption a ‘
fat
tax’ is the
wrong
instrument. Special school lessons,
for example
, are much more effective on long term and may can reverse the
current
, frightening development.
However
, at the
end
every one, except children, who should
be taught
by their parents, are responsible for their
own
.
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IELTS essay Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
412 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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