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Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than

Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than E3q1L
In this argument, the writer indicates that some anthropologists recommend that conducting research via interview-centered method is a better in obtaining accurate information on Tertain child-rearing practices. The author also cites two studies carried out by Dr. Field and Dr. Karp to support the recommendation. Close scrutiny of the studies and the evidences presented in the argument reveals that they lend little creditable support to the recommendation. Firstly of all, the argument is based on a false analogy between the two studies in that Dr. Field only studied the island of Tertia, yet Dr. Karp studied a group of islands including Tertia. Drawing any conclusion based on this false analogy renders nothing valid toward the recommendation. In fact, in research studies, the sample used in the study plays a vital role in validity of outcomes. In the above-mentioned studies, the samples used in the study are quite different. Perhaps Dr. Karp put more weight on other islands rather than Tertia, in which event comparing the results of these studies would amount to unreliable results. In short, query whether Dr. Karp studied the island of Tertia well enough must be answered in order to better assess the recommendation. Secondly, that the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village hardly supports the recommendation, since the author overlooks the possibility that, in the interviews, maybe the interviewer asked more question regarding the children’s biological parents rather than other adults in the village, in which event the children would certainly spend more time talking about their biological parents. Without responding to this vital query whether the interviewers put same weight on the children’s biological parents and the adults in the village during their interview, I remain unconvinced. Thirdly, the author assumes that all relevant circumstances related to Tertian child-rearing practices have remained unchanged with time. In twenty years, everything could have changed, rendering any conclusion about Tertian child-rearing practices unfair. Finally, the conclusion that interview-centered method should be prepared in future research on this subject seems too strong and parochial. The anthropologists, actually, overlook the possibility that other methods might be superior in obtaining accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices. Maybe a combination of the two foregoing methods serves a better function in garnering accurate information. Or maybe Dr. Field’s method with some adjustment would be significantly superior to Dr. Karp’s method. In short, we need to know about other possible methods as well as the quality of the information acquired from each of them. In sum, the argument is logically flawed, and therefore unpersuasive. To bolster the argument, the author must firstly, elaborate on the first flaw regarding the group of island studied by Dr. Karp; secondly, provide more information about the quality of interviews and the equality in the amount of time and energy allotted to study the island of Tertia by both doctors. Finally, we need to know whether any other possible method providing more accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices exist or not.
In this
argument
, the writer indicates that
some
anthropologists recommend that conducting research via interview-centered
method
is a better in obtaining
accurate
information
on
Tertain
child-rearing
practices
. The
author
also
cites two
studies
carried out by Dr. Field and Dr.
Karp
to support the recommendation.
Close scrutiny
of the
studies
and the evidences presented in the
argument
reveals that they lend
little
creditable support to the recommendation.

Firstly
of all, the
argument
is based
on a false analogy between the two
studies
in that Dr. Field
only
studied
the
island
of
Tertia
,
yet
Dr.
Karp
studied
a group of
islands
including
Tertia
. Drawing any conclusion based on this false analogy renders nothing valid toward the recommendation. In fact, in research
studies
, the sample
used
in the
study
plays a vital role in validity of outcomes. In the above-mentioned
studies
, the samples
used
in the
study
are quite
different
. Perhaps Dr.
Karp
put more weight on
other
islands
rather
than
Tertia
, in which
event
comparing the results of these
studies
would amount to unreliable results. In short, query whether Dr.
Karp
studied
the
island
of
Tertia
well
enough
must
be answered
in order to better assess the recommendation.

Secondly
, that the
children
spent much more
time
talking about their
biological
parents
than about
other
adults in the village hardly supports the recommendation, since the
author
overlooks the possibility that, in the interviews, maybe the interviewer asked more question regarding the
children’s
biological
parents
rather
than
other
adults in the village, in which
event
the
children
would
certainly
spend more
time
talking about their
biological
parents
. Without responding to this vital query whether the interviewers put same weight on the
children’s
biological
parents
and the adults in the village during their interview, I remain unconvinced.

Thirdly
, the
author
assumes that all relevant circumstances related to
Tertian
child-rearing
practices
have remained unchanged with
time
. In twenty years, everything could have
changed
, rendering any conclusion about
Tertian
child-rearing
practices
unfair.

Finally
, the conclusion that interview-centered
method
should
be prepared
in future research on this subject seems too strong and parochial. The anthropologists, actually, overlook the possibility that
other
methods
might be superior in obtaining
accurate
information
on
Tertian
child-rearing
practices
. Maybe a combination of the two foregoing
methods
serves a better function in garnering
accurate
information
. Or maybe Dr. Field’s
method
with
some
adjustment would be
significantly
superior to Dr.
Karp
’s
method
. In short, we need to know about
other
possible
methods
as well
as the quality of the
information
acquired from each of them.

In sum, the
argument
is
logically
flawed, and
therefore
unpersuasive. To bolster the
argument
, the
author
must
firstly
, elaborate on the
first
flaw regarding the group of
island
studied
by Dr.
Karp
;
secondly
, provide more
information
about the quality of interviews and the equality in the amount of
time
and energy allotted to
study
the
island
of
Tertia
by both doctors.
Finally
, we need to know whether any
other
possible
method
providing more
accurate
information
on
Tertian
child-rearing
practices
exist or not.
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IELTS essay Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than

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