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Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at

Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at jRDl8
The writer of the argument concludes, based on some groundless reports from local hunters, that the purported decline in deer population in Canada’s arctic regions are caused by the effects of recent global warming. The author further points out that deer’s failure in following their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea is directly responsible for the decline. Close scrutiny of the reports, upon them the conclusion is based, reveals that they lend little credible support to the author’s conclusion. The first argument against the conclusion regards the reports. The author does not indicate that how many dears or regions were studied in the reports. As you know, in such studies, the larger the sample used in the study, the more valid and reliable the findings are. Perhaps in this study, only one region with a few deer was studies, in which event the findings of this study are neither reliable nor valid. Even assuming that enough deer were studied, there is another crucial problem with the reports. According to the letter, Arctic deer live on the entire islands in Canada’s arctic regions. I would need to know whether the regions or regions were studied was or were representative of the deer live on the entire Canada’s arctic regions or not. However, the argument fails to offer any convincing evidence that this is the case. In short, I cannot accept the author’s recommendation unless the author provides evidence regarding the problems with reports. Yet another problem with the conclusion is that the author relies only on the coincidence of global warming and the decline in the population of deer. Absent evidence whether there is any cause-and-effect relationship between these two phenomena, the author’s conclusion is unconvincing. Perhaps the decline was resulted from uncontrolled excessive hunting of deer all over the regions. Or perhaps the travelers and tourists were responsible for the decline by affecting the migration patterns or the environment. Any of these scenarios, if true, would undermine the author’s conclusion. Even assuming that the global warming was responsible for the decline, there is still another problem with the argument. The author assumes that the decline was due to deer’s failure to follow their age-old migration patterns. Yet there is no substantiating evidence that this is the case. May be the deer died due to increase in the temperature. Or maybe food shortage, due to global warming unforeseen repercussions, led to decrease in the deer’s population in the arctic regions. Without accounting for these and other plausible alternative explanations, I remain unconvinced. In sum, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unpersuasive. To bolster the argument, the author must provide evidence that the reports are eligible in respects of being significant in size as well as being representative of the larger population. We would also need to know whether deer’s failure in following their age-old migration patterns were, by itself, responsible for the decline in the deer’s population. Finally, I would need to know that no other factors involving the coincidence affected the reports.
The writer of the
argument
concludes, based on
some
groundless
reports
from local hunters, that the purported
decline
in deer
population
in Canada’s arctic
regions
are caused
by the effects of recent
global
warming
. The
author
further
points out that deer’s failure in following their age-
old
migration
patterns
across the frozen sea is
directly
responsible
for the
decline
.
Close scrutiny
of the
reports
, upon them the
conclusion
is based
, reveals that they lend
little
credible support to the
author’s
conclusion.

The
first
argument
against the
conclusion
regards the
reports
. The
author
does not indicate that how
many
dears or
regions
were studied
in the
reports
. As you
know
, in such
studies
, the larger the sample
used
in the
study
, the more valid and reliable the findings are. Perhaps in this
study
,
only
one
region
with a few deer was
studies
, in which
event
the findings of this
study
are neither reliable nor valid. Even assuming that
enough
deer
were studied
, there is another crucial
problem
with the
reports
. According to the letter, Arctic deer
live
on the entire islands in Canada’s arctic
regions
. I would need to
know
whether the
regions
or
regions
were studied
was or were representative of the deer
live
on the entire Canada’s arctic
regions
or not.
However
, the
argument
fails to offer any convincing
evidence
that this is the case. In short, I cannot accept the
author’s
recommendation unless the
author
provides
evidence
regarding the
problems
with reports.

Yet
another
problem
with the
conclusion
is that the
author
relies
only
on the coincidence of
global
warming
and the
decline
in the
population
of deer. Absent
evidence
whether there is any cause-and-effect relationship between these two phenomena, the
author’s
conclusion
is unconvincing. Perhaps the
decline
was resulted
from uncontrolled excessive hunting of deer all over the
regions
. Or perhaps the travelers and tourists were
responsible
for the
decline
by affecting the
migration
patterns
or the environment. Any of these scenarios, if true, would undermine the
author’s
conclusion.

Even assuming that the
global
warming
was
responsible
for the
decline
, there is
still
another
problem
with the
argument
. The
author
assumes that the
decline
was due to deer’s failure to follow their age-
old
migration
patterns
.
Yet
there is no substantiating
evidence
that this is the case.
May be
the deer
died
due to increase in the temperature. Or maybe food shortage, due to
global
warming
unforeseen repercussions, led to decrease in the deer’s
population
in the arctic
regions
. Without accounting for these and other plausible alternative explanations, I remain unconvinced.

In sum, the
argument
is
logically
flawed and
therefore
unpersuasive. To bolster the
argument
, the
author
must
provide
evidence
that the
reports
are eligible in respects of being
significant in size
as well
as being representative of the larger
population
. We would
also
need to
know
whether deer’s failure in following their age-
old
migration
patterns
were, by itself,
responsible
for the
decline
in the deer’s
population
.
Finally
, I would need to
know
that no other factors involving the coincidence
affected
the
reports
.
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IELTS essay Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at

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