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Traditional classrooms in the past held lectures with multiple participants. Now that technology makes it easier and faster for students to access information, the need for traditional classroom discussion is becoming less popular. It’s because the inte v.1

Traditional classrooms in the past held lectures with multiple participants. Now that technology makes it easier and faster for students to access information, the need for traditional classroom discussion is becoming less popular. It’s because the inte v. 1
In today's world of modernization, a section of advocates, suggests that the government should allocate more money on improving railways as compared to roads. Another group of people argue that trains are a thing of the past. I agree with the former and would like to highlight various advantages and disadvantages of encouraging the development of our train system. I agree because of 2 major reasons. Firstly, studies show that nearly 50% of air pollutants in our environment are released by vehicles such as, cars and bikes. Furthermore, science explains that the amount of carbon dioxide released into our atmosphere by a train is very less, in comparison to automobiles to transport the same number of people. Unfortunately, a majority of people prefer road based travel to go to a nearby location. As a consequence, a large amount of fossil fuel is utilized to take humans from one place to another. Secondly, railway tickets are much cheaper than taking our own car to reach distant locations. As a result, every family can save a lot of money by utilizing this less costly method. I disagree with this suggestion in view of 2 main key points. Primarily, the road is more convenient for our daily activities for instance, going to work. The reason behind this is that the time can be decided as per our own choice, unlike a typical train schedule. Hence, it is easier to use the road to go anywhere nearby. In addition to this, roads in poor condition are an important cause of many accidents. For example, nearly 20% of car crashes in colder regions are due to bad maintenance during snowfall. Therefore, an increased funding is required to make them developed for safer passage of passengers. In conclusion, I would like to firmly agree with the suggestion of improving our rail system in comparison to the roads as the number of advantages outweigh the drawbacks. Our government should consider these important points while allocating the budget for the benefit of humanity and our planet.
In
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today
's world of modernization, a section of advocates, suggests that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should allocate more money on improving railways as compared to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
. Another group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
argue that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
are a thing of the past. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the former and would like to highlight various advantages and disadvantages of encouraging the development of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
system.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of 2 major reasons.
Firstly
, studies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
that
nearly
50% of air pollutants in our environment
are released
by vehicles such as, cars and bikes.
Furthermore
, science
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explains
that the amount of carbon dioxide released into our atmosphere by a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
less,
in comparison
to automobiles to transport the same number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. Unfortunately, a majority of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
prefer
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
road based
travel to go to a nearby location. As a consequence, a large amount of fossil fuel
is utilized
to take humans from one place to another.
Secondly
, railway tickets are much cheaper than taking our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
car to reach distant locations.
As a result
, every family can save
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
money by utilizing this less costly method.

I disagree with this suggestion in view of 2 main key points.
Primarily
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
is more convenient for our daily activities
for instance
, going to work. The reason behind this is that the time can
be decided
as per our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
choice, unlike a typical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
schedule.
Hence
, it is easier to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
to go anywhere nearby.
In addition
to this,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
in poor condition are an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
cause of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
accidents.
For example
,
nearly
20% of car crashes in colder regions are due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
maintenance during snowfall.
Therefore
, an increased funding
is required
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them developed for safer passage of passengers.

In conclusion
, I would like to
firmly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the suggestion of improving our rail system
in comparison
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
as the number of advantages outweigh the drawbacks. Our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should consider these
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
points while allocating the budget for the benefit of humanity and our planet.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Traditional classrooms in the past held lectures with multiple participants. Now that technology makes it easier and faster for students to access information, the need for traditional classroom discussion is becoming less popular. It’s because the inte v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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