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tpo 46 using electronic medical records rather than paper-based records

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The material discusses the approach of storing patients' information in electronic databases rather tham paper-based records. While the reading mentions that using electronic records have many virtues, the listening challenges this and states that all these benefits are uncertain. First, the author posits that implementing electronic record can save money. On the other hand, the professor opposes this and says that this benefit is not significant as the reading mentioned. The lecturer explains that doctors who adopt electronic medica records could not discontinue paper records. The speaker adds that they still use paper-based records as a backup for legal purposes. As a result, the lecturer contends that adapting to electronic medical records, people will stil have to pay the cost that related to the paper records. Second, the reading states that using electronic medical records could reduce errors related to doctors' poor handwriting. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes this and points out that most doctors still use pen and paper when they chek their patients to take notes. in addition to that, the professor adds that other medical stuffs take these notes and inter them to the computer. therefore, the speaker explains that using this approch will still lead to the same errors related to poor handwriting. Third, the writer mentions that using electronic medical records could help medical research. Conversely, the speaker contradicts this and states that research still finds it difficult to access electronic patients' information. The professor explains that in the US, there is a strict privacy law, so patients could keep their record private. Furthermore, the lecturer adds that researchers should follow many strict procedures to get permission to access patients' information. The listening states that patients could block their records from others rather than their medical treatments.
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have
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virtues, the listening challenges this and
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that all these benefits are uncertain.

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, the author posits that implementing
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electronic
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can save money.
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, the professor opposes this and says that this benefit is not significant as the reading mentioned. The
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lecturer
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explains
that doctors who adopt
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could not discontinue paper
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. The speaker
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as a backup for legal purposes.
As a result
, the
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lecturer
contends that adapting to
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pay the cost that related to the paper records.

Second, the reading
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that using
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could
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errors related to doctors' poor handwriting.
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, the
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refutes this and points out that most doctors
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their patients to take notes.
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could
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research.
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states
that research
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finds it difficult to access
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patients' information. The professor
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explains
that in the US, there is a strict privacy law,
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patients could
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keep
their
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private.
Furthermore
, the
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that researchers should follow
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strict procedures to
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get
permission to access patients' information. The listening
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states
that patients could block their
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records
from others
rather
than their
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medical
treatments.
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IELTS essay tpo 46 using electronic medical records rather than paper-based records

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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